37℃
photo by Pitsch from pixabay
37℃
by my feet
the asphalt,
sunbaked,
dead leaves crispy,
yellow painted lines
cracked,
flaking,
the sighs
of vehicle tyres rushing by,
turning, churning,
a chain gang
herding
dust, paper, plastics
to the kerbs,
the mynahs hide in the shades
not bothering about food,
the tired leaves
of July,
keeps falling
and then
hesitant
again,
the air
unmoving,
hot,
still silence.
26/02/2025
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And this is the original poem, posted on this blog 15 years ago, that was used to "write it backwards". It is reproduced below.
Spring
still silence
the air
hesitant
to move
the leaves of spring
are not green
not yet
like sighs
sun crisped
they drop
from boughs
to the asphalt
by my feet.
written 14/02/2010
Chinese New Year
revised 07/03/2010
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So dear reader, which poem do you prefer? After writing the new one, I still think the original is better, sharp and to the point. What I like about the new one is it goes like a single breath.
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2025
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