over the rooftops
photo by Daniel van den Berg at Unsplash
over the rooftops
over the rooftops from which
the blackbirds have passed
the clouds hung like a wet veil
as the evening retreated
a flash of lightning lit up a second
white as a shroud
the wind moaned by, trapping dust
and leaves in its blast.
30/04/2012
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and this is the poem that inspired the above :
On Fields O'er Which the Reaper's Hand Has Pass'd
On fields o'er which the reaper's hand has pass'd
Lit by the harvest moon and autumn sun,
My thoughts like stubble floating in the wind
And of such fineness as October airs,
There after harvest could I glean my life
A richer harvest reaping without toil,
And weaving gorgeous fancies at my will
In subtler webs than finest summer haze.
-- Henry David Thoreau
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Labels: heartlands, landscape, Poetry, rain, urban
14 Comments:
Nice flash capture of scene and mood.
Magic in your beautifully penned poem.
Colleen,
😃
Thank you!
Helen,
😃
Thank you!
The otherworldly affair is luring, but for a while let us watch the harvest moon and autumn sun here
Love this poem Some great lines like 'the clouds hung like a wet veil
as the evening retreated'and'the wind moaned by, trapping dust
and leaves in its blast' fantastic
An evening with a little of Nature's natural excitement
Makes an evening to remember
.
Nice read in a small package. Thank you
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The blackbirds, wet veil and shroud... set up quite a mood!
Jossina,
Thank you!
harvest moon and autumn sun seems more watchable. 😄
Marja,
Thank you!
Glad you like it. 😀
Jim,
Thank you!
Yes, even though it was a cold, bleak evening. 😀
Rajani,
Thank you!
Glad it does. 😀
I love your poem. Yes the mood may be a little bleak but the language is beautiful and the image vivid. I actually like it even better than the Thoreau.
I found that beautiful, and enjoyable to read several times over! I'll be thinking about it for a while.
Rosemary,
Thank you!
I am totally flattered. 😄
Lisa,
Thank you!
To think that I actually wrote it for a NaPoWriMo entry, done in one 'take'. I am beginning to like this poem more and more myself through the years. 😀
A storm that fails to break the heat/humidity is a cheerless thing. The poem describes that well. Welcome to my world this weekend...thank you for writing about it!
Oh Priscilla, it can't be that bad, can it? 😄
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