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This was a challenge on Day 2 of SingPoWriMo 2023 (Singapore Poetry Writing Month). It was to write a "liwuli". A what? Okay, description below.
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minus one
It should not be this way of course, a hard cookie crumbling. It is unfair for both of us. And chemo is not cheap either.
It is now a night of waiting
quick footsteps
cold coffee.
Have you seen tracers firing into the night sky, are they like red ribbons?
02/04/2023
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A liwuli is a poetic form deriving from South East Asian rhetorical traditions. It consists of 3 stanzas:
The Strawbs - The Winter Long
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2023
minus one
It should not be this way of course, a hard cookie crumbling. It is unfair for both of us. And chemo is not cheap either.
It is now a night of waiting
quick footsteps
cold coffee.
Have you seen tracers firing into the night sky, are they like red ribbons?
02/04/2023
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A liwuli is a poetic form deriving from South East Asian rhetorical traditions. It consists of 3 stanzas:
- the first stanza contains exactly 31 syllables in the form of a prose poem, and should be phrased entirely in terms of instructions.
- the second stanza consists of 14 syllables, and is broken into 3 lines (the length of each line is up to the writer as long as its 14 syllables).
- the third stanza consists of 19 syllables, broken into as many lines you want. the third stanza should be phrased entirely in terms of questions.
The Strawbs - The Winter Long
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2023
Labels: 90's, grief, liwuli, love, lovesongs, prompt, SingPoWriMo 2023
posted by dsnake1 at 12:01 AM
13 Comments:
Oh, I love your iwuli! And of course I can hardly wait to try this intriguing form.
Oops, sorry – liwuli.
Thank you, Rosemary!
Yes, please give it a try. It follows some strict parameters, but i guess they are there for a reason, just like the sijo.
This is a very beautifully executed piece. There's so much love and pain held in these lines. You've got me curious to give it a whirl too.
Thank you, Rommy!
Yes, I would love to see you give this form a try. I find it can be pretty elegant. :)
Very interesting form
This is fantastic. So much conveyed in so few words
This is an exquisite form ... as is your rendering! Huge sighs from this lady ~ a form I am going to attempt this week! Thank you so much.
Oh love this poem and totally want to try this form...!!!Thanks for teaching it!!
Vanderloost,
Yes, quite an interesting form. :)
JYP,
Thank you!
It makes you choose words that much more carefully. :)
Helen,
Thank you!
I am sure you will have no problems attempting it. :)
Rajani,
Thank you!
My pleasure. Please give this form a try. :)
https://thotpurge.wordpress.com/2023/05/22/learning-liwuli/
That's my first shot!! :)
Oh wow, Rajani, that's great, your first shot at a liwuli!
I followed the link and left a comment there. I think that it is a very commendable effort. :)
Rosemary tried one too (I saw it on her instagram account), and I think it is very good.
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