janice
Alright, I am still up to the nose with work, and I have survived a week (or two) of the flu, so I have to dig another one from the NaPoWriMo archives. This one is from the 14th day. Some slight revision done. I even throw in a drawing I have done. :)
This is the first dance I ever had, that's why it sort of stays in the mind. :)
image by dsnake1
janice
always
that dance
it plays
all over
like a jammed vinyl
when i hear
that song
in a store
the train the radio
though it has been
almost
a lifetime
since
we left
and still
like a bridge
across time
i see
just the two
of us
though there are others
on the dance floor
my hand
on your slim waist
your warm body
close to mine
a hint
of heady
perfume
and me
trying very hard
not to step
on your shoes.
14/04/09
revised 23/06/09
If you want to compare the original poem, it's here
The picture is a scan of a pencil drawing on paper which was done a long time ago.
words and image © cheong lee san, 2009
This is the first dance I ever had, that's why it sort of stays in the mind. :)
image by dsnake1
janice
always
that dance
it plays
all over
like a jammed vinyl
when i hear
that song
in a store
the train the radio
though it has been
almost
a lifetime
since
we left
and still
like a bridge
across time
i see
just the two
of us
though there are others
on the dance floor
my hand
on your slim waist
your warm body
close to mine
a hint
of heady
perfume
and me
trying very hard
not to step
on your shoes.
14/04/09
revised 23/06/09
If you want to compare the original poem, it's here
The picture is a scan of a pencil drawing on paper which was done a long time ago.
words and image © cheong lee san, 2009
posted by dsnake1 at 11:36 PM
6 Comments:
I like the simplicity and the innocence portrayed. A quiet, nostalgic green patch. Thanks for sharing.
kondratas,
thanks for visiting and leaving your comments. :)
Oh, I love seeing a portrait of her. Poignant, quiet, youth. My heart dances reading and seeing.
Miss you!
(Please note the new blog link.)
hey gel,
great to hear from you!
i think it's a nice little drawing too. that was actually done a long time ago. you should see the colour of the paper..:)
i have not been posting much lately because of work ( i know, the same old excuse).
and thanks for the link. SoulCrayons, that's a beautiful name for a blog. :)
i like the poems you wrote here.
Jade,
thanks for visiting. :)
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