colours
I wanted to enter haikuworld's Special January 2009 "Toku" kukai in honour of William J. Higginson. The theme was "Colours" or the name of a colour. I missed the deadline by a couple of days.
I wondered how my works would have fared if I had sent them in. :)
photo by DHester
image from pixelperfectdigital.com
colours
rainbow.
a child plays
with a box of crayons
first kiss -
her lips
red as flames
a truck backfires.
blackbirds scattered
like shrapnel
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) ¥
I wondered how my works would have fared if I had sent them in. :)
photo by DHester
image from pixelperfectdigital.com
colours
rainbow
rainbow.
a child plays
with a box of crayons
lips
first kiss -
her lips
red as flames
shrapnel
a truck backfires.
blackbirds scattered
like shrapnel
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) ¥
posted by dsnake1 at 11:55 PM
15 Comments:
All are very vivid as you intended.
You should have sent them. I think that last one had a good chance of winning.
i failed to submit to this kukai, too... no inspiration.
i can't say how your submissions would have fared buti like them, espeially rainbow
gautami,
thank you! i am very satisfied with these 3 i wrote. :)
i think the last one has a vivid image. the inspiration came during a cycling trip. a truck backfired and the crows and mynahs flew off in all directions. :)
polona,
you should have submitted to this kukai. :)
i was held up by work and when i wanted to submit them, i realised the deadline was over. :(
Like Polona I love the crayons. You should submit them for publication some where.
:)
Pat, thank you!
i am thinking of submitting some poems for publication, i am working on some at the moment...
Great theme: colour (and goes with the "art" theme circulating for a post a lot of did.)
I like the contrast among this group of haikus and the progression, as if from a child (carefree playing/exploring) to teen or adult(love/rapture) to adult responsibility (where those rainbows are obliterated as well as the red flames of love)
Each, conjures up vivid colors even more than what is said
"rainbow" "lips" "shrapnel"
Gel,
thanks for your comment!
yes, i read your recent post and coincidentally it's also on colours. that's telepathy or what! :)
now that you mentioned it, it does look like a progression from childhood to adulthood. that's the beauty of writing. sometimes the reader see things the writer don't.
dang, i should have sent the whole lot in. :D
all lovely!!
:)
thank you, magiceye!
magical words
First kiss touched me
Nasra Al Adawi
Nasra,
it's great to hear from you again! :)
beautiful...
hi Binoy Mathew
thanks for visiting! :)
Its a nice post.
Write poetry
AMIT,
thank you!
and thanks for the link too. :)
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