urban snapshots in monochrome : rain
Imagine, a miserable wait at a bus shelter on one rainy night can inspire this. The muse is working overtime. :)
photo by mconnors
image from morguefile.com
needles
waiting at a bus shelter
for the rain to stop,
hungry and going nowhere,
and the rain stabs
like tiny needles
in the harsh haloes
of street lamps.
cold rain on my face
and soon the night will be colder
without you.
15-08-08
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© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 )
photo by mconnors
image from morguefile.com
needles
waiting at a bus shelter
for the rain to stop,
hungry and going nowhere,
and the rain stabs
like tiny needles
in the harsh haloes
of street lamps.
cold rain on my face
and soon the night will be colder
without you.
15-08-08
********
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 )
posted by dsnake1 at 12:01 AM
20 Comments:
Stabbing....
Anything to inspire you....:D
Wish it rained here. It is 34 Deg C here. October was so hot like this!
:D
the weather is pretty kind over here this october. there's no smoky haze this time round and there's some rain to keep the place cool. :)
It's been raining here every afternoon. Reading about the needle-prick sensation on skin reminds me of the different shapes and weight of raindrops -- one of my favorite things to watch. The fat, pill-shaped ones would be my top favorite, heehee.
yeah, your comment reminds me that raindrops come in various shapes and weight. :)
my favourite is the one that is illuminated by a bright light on a dark background. they do look like needles. hence the title of this piece .:)
How and when do we find comfort, warmth, and shelter? Even the best shelters leak in the worst storms.
>>Even the best shelters leak in the worst storms.
that's very true, deborah.
Brilliant. So simple a subject yet so vivid one can feel the rain just by reading!
- Liz
Waiting a bus
which never stopped --
This cool world!
Liz,
long time no hear from you.:)
thank you, Liz. sometimes the most unlikeliest place and time can prompt a poem. :)
tikkis,
:D
i like that!
generally, our bus services over here are quite ok, except sometimes, it's always very packed (at least on the route i always take.) :)
Variation:
overcrowded bus
didn't stop --
no room for me!
(Hmn; I wonder whether the cold feeling still existing here?)
ps2: A nice photo!
sad but beautiful - made me feel like I was there.
hehe! i am enjoying your entertaining haiku here. :)
Tikkis, i think if the bus didn't stop for you, you will be feeling a bit hot under the collar. :D
i got this photo from morguefile.com. They have loads of photos for free downloads.
thanks, andrew!
i composed this piece right there at the bus shelter. that's inspiration!
One of your best brother. :)
Alson
hey bro, it's great to hear from you!
when are you going to start writing again? :)
poignantly beautiful
thank you, magiceye. :)
variation #3:
overcrowded bus
did stop anyway --
I feel cool!
Tikkis, that's cool! :)
allow me :
overcrowded bus
did stop.
still no room up.
which reminds me of the direct bus service which i was to take tonight after work. waited and waited for the bus but it didn't appear, until i got fed-up and took another service which is of a longer route. did i just mentioned that our bus services over here are quite ok? :(
beautiful. *applause*
~hrix
hi hrix,
thank you! :)
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