Tuesday, August 18, 2009

evening bus home

This piece kicked off my NaPoWriMo month of madness.

It was already evening and I was telling myself, hey, there's less than 6 hours before the deadline and there's still no poem yet, and no idea what to write. I work best under pressure, or the muse took pity on me. In less than half an hour, I have this.:)

For this post, there are some slight revisions done to the original.

photo by kevin connors
image from morguefile.com

evening bus home

in the bus
we look like
soldiers back
from battle

some guy massaging
his head

a cough here
a cellphone rings
amidst the drone
of travel

a shuffle of feet
the beeps
of electronic cards
on readers

i try
not to be
by all these

as the sky
a nasty shade
of grey

i have only
15 stops
or so
before home.

revised 28/06/2009

© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ), 2009

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Blogger gautami tripathy said...

Sounds like you are speaking for me!

26 August, 2009 17:53  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


at least, the bus has air-con. :)

(i have not been visiting or posting much lately, work has taken up much of the time. )

27 August, 2009 00:08  
Anonymous b said...

You have done what we all need to do...turn the mundane into poetry. It is all in one's perspective.

Thank you.


19 October, 2009 02:27  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hi b,
thanks for visiting.

that's what poetry is all about, isn't it? :)

19 October, 2009 23:17  
Anonymous Leila said...

Hi, just wondering if this poet is Australian?

THank you.


21 October, 2009 08:36  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

looks like you've been out for a while. I did the same. seemed to just run out. slowly it's coming back. hope you come back, too- and hope everything is o.k. with you.

21 October, 2009 10:46  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hi Leila

thanks for visiting.

no, i am from singapore.:)


it's always great to hear from you. :)

i am terribly busy with work these past months ( a project) but i hope to post again soon. there are times when i seem to run out of energy and ideas after a day's work, but things are still ok.

21 October, 2009 23:40  

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