before the rain
photo by Nick van den Berg at Unsplash
before the rain
The grey clouds rolled away
the afternoon sun
like a squad car shooing off
the crowd at a crime scene,
pulled DO-NOT-CROSS tapes
across the sky
with flares of lightning,
and the blackbirds,
perched at the edges
of the roofs
of apartment blocks,
hesitant
to fly.
05/04/2009
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Shared on Friday Writings #56: Cozy. This poem is certainly not cozy. š
Uriah Heep - Rain
Ā© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2022
Labels: 2000's, heartlands, landscape, NaPoWriMo, one sentence, rain, urban
15 Comments:
You've definitely built up an unsettling sort of mood, making the reader apprehensive about the rain. Nicely done.
I love this (short but vivid) description.
Rommy,
Thank you.
i guess that was the intention, unsettling. :)
Rosemary,
Thank you.
sometimes less is more. :)
Nice extended metaphor :-)
Thank you, Priscilla! :)
Oh I like the lightning ticker tapes!!!
Ah, the lightning tapes!
Thank you, Rajani! :)
A wonderful moment captured! Great poem.
Thank you, Stacy.
Thanks for the visit to my blog. :)
I like the action image!
Thank you, Colleen!
We have some pretty unexpected thunderstorms here. :)
Decidedly uncozy. Iām thinking about the hesitant birds.
š Definitely!
Thank you, Sara!
Well written
Thank you, Ashok! :)
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