i thought i hear your voice in the wind

Okay. I thought I wrote a triolet. I was younger then and don't know much. It is not a triolet, at least not a true one. Can I call it a variant of a triolet? I even drew a new drawing for it.

pencil sketch by dsnake1 enhanced with Snapseed



i thought i hear your voice in the wind


i thought i hear your voice in the wind
but it was just me whispering your name.
though i have grown old and tired and bitter
i thought i hear your voice in the wind
through all the years, the static, the babble
and battles, without you, are not the same
i thought i hear your voice in the wind
but it was just me whispering your name.


05.09.2007
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"Grief is the price we pay for love."
- Queen Elizabeth II

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The triolet's form is pretty straightforward. The first line is repeated in the 4th and 7th lines. The 2nd line is repeated in the final line, which looks like there is nothing much to write. The first two end words are used to complete the rhyming scheme. Thus the triolet looks like this : ABaAabAB, the capital letters are repeated lines.

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© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2022

a triolet : i thought i hear your voice in the wind

I am posting this poem for Thursday Poets' Rally Week 45.

This is an attempt to write a triolet. I am using a refrain from another poem I wrote, and try to weave that into a love story.

Seems to work if read aloud. :)

pencil sketch by dsnake1





i thought i hear your voice in the wind



i thought i hear your voice in the wind
but it was just me whispering your name.
though i have grown old and tired and bitter
i thought i hear your voice in the wind
through all the years, the static, the babble
and battles, without you, are not the same
i thought i hear your voice in the wind
but it was just me whispering your name.


05.09.07
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© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ), 2011

a triolet : i thought i hear your voice in the wind

one of my few attempts at structured verse. Tried one of the easiest, the triolet.

The first 2 lines are taken from a refrain of a poem that i wrote some time back. I think it's rather sad, but lovely.



image by dsnake1


i thought i hear your voice in the wind


i thought i hear your voice in the wind
but it was just me whispering your name.
though i have grown old and tired and bitter
i thought i hear your voice in the wind
through all the years, the static, the babble
and battles, without you, are not the same
i thought i hear your voice in the wind
but it was just me whispering your name.


05.09.07
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Not sure if line 3 should rhyme with line 4 and line 5, but i read somewhere that line 3 need not rhyme with line 4, but line 3 must rhyme with line 5. Maybe someone can help me? See, I am lost already.


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