Heavy Metal
The muse is back. I was watching an awesome display of lightning during a thunderstorm when the words just sort of dropped in. She's still angry, yeah.
image by dsnake1
Heavy Metal
the sky was rocking
heavy metal,
clouds bruised
blue black,
as white light slashed
across its face
it growled
as in pain.
i leaned at the window
watched
as my cigarette smoke
curled outside
to die
in the rain.
13.12.06
********
Yikes!
image by dsnake1
Heavy Metal
the sky was rocking
heavy metal,
clouds bruised
blue black,
as white light slashed
across its face
it growled
as in pain.
i leaned at the window
watched
as my cigarette smoke
curled outside
to die
in the rain.
13.12.06
********
Yikes!
posted by dsnake1 at 12:02 AM
12 Comments:
This is very good.
I like watching lightning. Free fireworks.
Thank you, Liz!
it can get scary if you are outside. :)
really liked this
especially the second stanza
(though it takes its power from the build-up of the first - if that makes sense
i've not been up long - need more coffee) :)
cheers
i love watching thunderstorms from a safe place...
loved this one. could almost hear and see it.
floots,
thank you. i like the 2nd stanza too, and yes, it builds up from the first, :)
polona,
thank you. at this time of the year, there are many thunderstorms here. i watched this one from home, but the previous day, i was caught in one outside. :)
Pain lashes out destroying anything in its way. Excellent poem!!
Thunderstorms rock! (as you wrote)
Lightning is amazing.
Terrific poem! I especially like the analogy to "heavy metal" and the entire first stanza. So vivid in sound and images! Your second stanza is in perfect closure.
Lightning exhilarates me! I feel one with nature.
pat,
i do agree with you on that!
>>"Pain lashes out destroying anything in its way." :)
thanks!
gel,
thank you!
i do like this one too, it was written in a short span of time, and almost no revisions.
gautami,
i know. :)
recently you wrote about the monsoon.:)
..............fantastic......
magiceye,
thank you!
I really like the imagery in this.
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