Sunday, August 15, 2021

poetry lesson #8

On pouring rice grains into a plastic bin, or a metal bowl dropping onto the floor, and the contented pigeon cooing on my eaves, what chords are in the sounds?

- dsnake1

pencil sketch by dsnake1

poetry lesson #8
() sounds

poetry is sometimes like that
you pulled some sounds out of noise
and it is some sweet music

i have a test cd, it warns
the low bass may damage your speakers
i am listening to a bass guitarist
her riffs toss and warm you
her low bass may damage your speakers
but wraps you in a cocoon of emotion.

it is the same with poetry
the deeper you go into your soul
the easier to reach insanity.


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Shared on Writers' Pantry #83 at Poets and Storytellers United

© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2021

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Anonymous colleen Looseleaf said...

I like the metaphor of the bass can ruin your speakers for writing poetry and for life.

15 August, 2021 22:18  
Blogger rallentanda said...

We are surrounded by insanity...the deeper you go into your soul should be a refuge to hide away and find some peace....Take it easy and spoil yourself a bit:)

15 August, 2021 22:23  
Blogger indybev said...

I love your parallel of poetry to music. Perfectly penned! .. and a neat sketch as well!

15 August, 2021 23:20  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


thank you.
i was listening to songs when it crossed my mind.. :)


Thank you! shall take your advice & take it easy.
this half year, my poetry writing is on high rear. :)

15 August, 2021 23:22  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Thank you, Beverly.
Glad you like the sketch. :)

15 August, 2021 23:26  
Blogger Magaly Guerrero said...

If the last stanza is single, I would love to marry it. What a delicious, exhilarating, and slightly scary line trio. It's how I feel about poetry (and creative writing in general)--the words and help you find yourself or get you lost...

16 August, 2021 01:08  
Blogger Khaya Ronkainen said...

I enjoyed your poetry lessons, especially lesson #8 and its last stanza.

16 August, 2021 01:19  
Blogger Rommy said...

I love a good bass, but then I also like swimming around in strong emotional waters too. Of course that's where the undertow can take you if you aren't careful.

16 August, 2021 01:22  
Blogger Rommy said...

I can't resist a good base. Of course, I like a good tug on the emotions too.

16 August, 2021 01:44  
Anonymous Ron. Lavalette said...

I got the bass cranked up to max right now & I ain't worried...too late for that, I'm afraid.

16 August, 2021 01:45  
Blogger phillip woodruff (jalopy dreams) said...

"the deeper you go into your soul
the easier to reach insanity."

well said. i like the way you worked your way to that point. enjoyed this very much.

16 August, 2021 04:15  
Blogger Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Sounds enticing to me! Emotion tosses and warms, yes, if we're lucky – as music does, as poetry does – but that's not insanity. Insanity tends to divorce us from our natural feelings (don't ask me how I know).

16 August, 2021 09:26  
Blogger Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

Beautifully penned!

16 August, 2021 13:24  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


i think, for great poetry, for those unforgettable, timeless works, the writer must have reach deep into his sub-conscious, & memory to craft the imagery & words. :)


Thank you. :)


yes, watch the under currents when swimming around in strong emotional waters. :)

16 August, 2021 16:08  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


a good bass riff is addictive. :)


guess you beat me to it!


Thank you! :)

16 August, 2021 16:19  
Blogger ayala said...

Nicely done :)

16 August, 2021 18:04  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


Thank you!
but obsession can lead to unpleasant consequences. i was trying to say that if one tries too hard, it might not be a good thing. :)


Thank you! :)


Thank you! :)

16 August, 2021 22:30  
Blogger Helen said...

You have an exquisite style of writing ... and a talent for sketching. I love this!!!

17 August, 2021 00:26  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Thank you, Helen. :)

17 August, 2021 10:13  
Blogger Magical Mystical Teacher said...

Poetry can certainly lead us into places of which we were not previously aware.

18 August, 2021 10:13  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

yes, it can. it is like a vessel that explores new exciting places.
Thank you, Teacher, for visiting. :)

18 August, 2021 16:49  
Blogger ashok said...

Nice sketch Lee..and well written

18 August, 2021 17:43  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Thank you, Ashok! 😃

18 August, 2021 20:23  

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