Tuesday, February 03, 2009

colours

I wanted to enter haikuworld's Special January 2009 "Toku" kukai in honour of William J. Higginson. The theme was "Colours" or the name of a colour. I missed the deadline by a couple of days.

I wondered how my works would have fared if I had sent them in. :)


wax crayons
photo by DHester
image from pixelperfectdigital.com



colours


rainbow


rainbow.
a child plays
with a box of crayons



lips


first kiss -
her lips
red as flames



shrapnel


a truck backfires.
blackbirds scattered
         like shrapnel



© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) ¥

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15 Comments:

Blogger gautami tripathy said...

All are very vivid as you intended.

You should have sent them. I think that last one had a good chance of winning.

04 February, 2009 00:12  
Blogger polona said...

i failed to submit to this kukai, too... no inspiration.

i can't say how your submissions would have fared buti like them, espeially rainbow

04 February, 2009 02:28  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

gautami,
thank you! i am very satisfied with these 3 i wrote. :)

i think the last one has a vivid image. the inspiration came during a cycling trip. a truck backfired and the crows and mynahs flew off in all directions. :)


polona,
you should have submitted to this kukai. :)

i was held up by work and when i wanted to submit them, i realised the deadline was over. :(

04 February, 2009 21:30  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Like Polona I love the crayons. You should submit them for publication some where.

05 February, 2009 01:23  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

:)

Pat, thank you!

i am thinking of submitting some poems for publication, i am working on some at the moment...

05 February, 2009 23:10  
Anonymous gel(Emerald Eyes) said...

Great theme: colour (and goes with the "art" theme circulating for a post a lot of did.)

I like the contrast among this group of haikus and the progression, as if from a child (carefree playing/exploring) to teen or adult(love/rapture) to adult responsibility (where those rainbows are obliterated as well as the red flames of love)

Each, conjures up vivid colors even more than what is said

"rainbow" "lips" "shrapnel"

10 February, 2009 05:55  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Gel,
thanks for your comment!

yes, i read your recent post and coincidentally it's also on colours. that's telepathy or what! :)

now that you mentioned it, it does look like a progression from childhood to adulthood. that's the beauty of writing. sometimes the reader see things the writer don't.

dang, i should have sent the whole lot in. :D

10 February, 2009 08:46  
Blogger magiceye said...

all lovely!!

10 February, 2009 14:03  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

:)

thank you, magiceye!

10 February, 2009 22:36  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

magical words

First kiss touched me

Nasra Al Adawi

17 February, 2009 13:46  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Nasra,

it's great to hear from you again! :)

17 February, 2009 22:55  
Blogger Binoy Mathew said...

beautiful...

16 March, 2009 16:54  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi Binoy Mathew

thanks for visiting! :)

16 March, 2009 23:29  
Blogger AMIT said...

Its a nice post.

Write poetry

26 March, 2009 15:49  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

AMIT,

thank you!
and thanks for the link too. :)

26 March, 2009 23:22  

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