Tuesday, October 07, 2008

urban snapshots in monochrome : rain

Imagine, a miserable wait at a bus shelter on one rainy night can inspire this. The muse is working overtime. :)

Raindrops by mconnors
photo by mconnors
image from morguefile.com




needles



waiting at a bus shelter
for the rain to stop,
hungry and going nowhere,
and the rain stabs
like tiny needles
in the harsh haloes
of street lamps.

cold rain on my face
and soon the night will be colder
without you.


15-08-08
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© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 )

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20 Comments:

Anonymous gautami tripathy said...

Stabbing....

Anything to inspire you....:D

Wish it rained here. It is 34 Deg C here. October was so hot like this!

07 October, 2008 00:21  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

:D

the weather is pretty kind over here this october. there's no smoky haze this time round and there's some rain to keep the place cool. :)

07 October, 2008 21:59  
Blogger S.L. Corsua said...

It's been raining here every afternoon. Reading about the needle-prick sensation on skin reminds me of the different shapes and weight of raindrops -- one of my favorite things to watch. The fat, pill-shaped ones would be my top favorite, heehee.

08 October, 2008 08:10  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

yeah, your comment reminds me that raindrops come in various shapes and weight. :)

my favourite is the one that is illuminated by a bright light on a dark background. they do look like needles. hence the title of this piece .:)

08 October, 2008 23:57  
Blogger Deborah Vatcher said...

How and when do we find comfort, warmth, and shelter? Even the best shelters leak in the worst storms.

10 October, 2008 02:48  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

>>Even the best shelters leak in the worst storms.

that's very true, deborah.

10 October, 2008 09:47  
Anonymous Liz said...

Brilliant. So simple a subject yet so vivid one can feel the rain just by reading!

- Liz

11 October, 2008 22:26  
Blogger Tikkis said...

Waiting a bus
which never stopped --
This cool world!

12 October, 2008 00:18  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Liz,

long time no hear from you.:)
thank you, Liz. sometimes the most unlikeliest place and time can prompt a poem. :)

tikkis,

:D

i like that!
generally, our bus services over here are quite ok, except sometimes, it's always very packed (at least on the route i always take.) :)

12 October, 2008 17:21  
Blogger Tikkis said...

Variation:

overcrowded bus
didn't stop --
no room for me!


(Hmn; I wonder whether the cold feeling still existing here?)

ps2: A nice photo!

13 October, 2008 04:00  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

sad but beautiful - made me feel like I was there.

13 October, 2008 12:17  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hehe! i am enjoying your entertaining haiku here. :)
Tikkis, i think if the bus didn't stop for you, you will be feeling a bit hot under the collar. :D

i got this photo from morguefile.com. They have loads of photos for free downloads.


thanks, andrew!

i composed this piece right there at the bus shelter. that's inspiration!

13 October, 2008 23:47  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

One of your best brother. :)

Alson

13 October, 2008 23:53  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hey bro, it's great to hear from you!

when are you going to start writing again? :)

14 October, 2008 20:37  
Blogger magiceye said...

poignantly beautiful

15 October, 2008 13:01  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, magiceye. :)

15 October, 2008 19:47  
Blogger Tikkis said...

variation #3:

overcrowded bus
did stop anyway --
I feel cool!

17 October, 2008 02:49  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Tikkis, that's cool! :)

allow me :

overcrowded bus
did stop.
still no room up.

which reminds me of the direct bus service which i was to take tonight after work. waited and waited for the bus but it didn't appear, until i got fed-up and took another service which is of a longer route. did i just mentioned that our bus services over here are quite ok? :(

17 October, 2008 22:26  
Blogger hrix said...

beautiful. *applause*

~hrix

10 November, 2008 00:19  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi hrix,
thank you! :)

11 November, 2008 00:30  

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