Sunday, October 21, 2007

my old sergeant

Hi folks, back from my break!

I met a person from my old days, and the following poem is the result of that meeting. Hope it's good. ( I kind of like it, but maybe I am biased.) :)

the march of time
photo by clarita
more images from morguefile

my old sergeant

my old sergeant
calls to me
from a bus stop.
he still remembers me
maybe i am the nerdy one
i don't give him trouble.

we talk
and laugh.

we are old men now
how time has aged a soldier,
he walks with a cane today.

was it not long ago
i saw him dismount
from an armoured carrier
carbine slung across
his chest
walking through a haze
of red dust
churned up
by battle vehicles?

we talk
about the old days.
we laugh
cough a bit

and then
go about our
separate ways.


mood of the day
mood of the day

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Blogger floots said...

it capture both
the now
the then
i like it too
(and i'm not biased) :)

21 October, 2007 22:43  
Blogger polona said...

a lovely nostalgic piece.

22 October, 2007 03:55  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

this is true through the world. you could see the same story of people in the U.S. Army. Wonderful!!

22 October, 2007 13:40  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thanks! yes, that's it, the now and the then. :)

thanks for the kind words. :)

that's true, i think this camaraderie is universal for those who have served.

22 October, 2007 21:27  
Blogger magiceye said...

and the bubble bursts....

23 October, 2007 22:06  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thanks! :)

24 October, 2007 00:08  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

I am biased and I like and relate all too well!!

26 October, 2007 21:33  
Blogger S.L. Corsua said...

The starkness of the imagery in the flashback in the fourth stanza -- an effective contrast to the tranquillity of the rest of the piece. The sense of brotherhood here is indeed a strong and lasting 'tie that binds'.

26 October, 2007 22:57  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Oh how nice for you both!
You deftly conveyed the serendipity as well as the lifelong connections
and passage of time.
Hope you run into each other again.

27 October, 2007 15:22  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

i am glad you are biased. :)

hi soulless,
thanks for visiting! :)

i guess the imagery works! i was trying to contrast the swashbuckling old days with the tranquil pace of now.

If you don't mind, i would like to link your blog here. :)

thank you! :)
it was a wonderful moment. there was so much to talk. I found out that he lives near my workplace, so yes,there will be chances for us to run into each other again.

27 October, 2007 17:10  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Hey, you are not biased at all. I like it!

29 October, 2007 02:01  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

That's great that you two can get together again! :)-

30 October, 2007 11:03  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

but i still think i am a bit biased. :)

thank you! :)

30 October, 2007 23:20  
Blogger S.L. Corsua said...

Hullo again. I certainly won't mind the link; it would be an honor. I'll be doing the same and will be dropping by for updates on your site. I enjoy the read. ^_^

01 November, 2007 18:00  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


01 November, 2007 23:11  
Blogger Medusa aka expiringpoet said...

wow...nice one! Love the juxtaposition and the contrast of the past and the now...nicely captured bro! enjoyed it, thank you!

03 November, 2007 11:56  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, EP.
yah, i was trying to paint a contrast between the past and the now, and i guess it works. :)

03 November, 2007 23:16  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

I like this poem a lot. Glad you are still keeping up your blog. So many from the image prompting days are are either shut down, standing idle or have been designated "private". Keep up your good and worthy work!

Rick Mobbs

21 January, 2016 09:53  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hey Rick, glad to hear from you again. ah, those image prompting days are so fun. :)

this poem is one of my personal favourites.

21 January, 2016 23:12  

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