my old sergeant
Hi folks, back from my break!
I met a person from my old days, and the following poem is the result of that meeting. Hope it's good. ( I kind of like it, but maybe I am biased.) :)
photo by clarita
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my old sergeant
my old sergeant
calls to me
from a bus stop.
he still remembers me
maybe i am the nerdy one
or
i don't give him trouble.
we talk
and laugh.
we are old men now
how time has aged a soldier,
he walks with a cane today.
was it not long ago
i saw him dismount
from an armoured carrier
carbine slung across
his chest
walking through a haze
of red dust
churned up
by battle vehicles?
we talk
about the old days.
we laugh
cough a bit
and then
go about our
separate ways.
19/10/07
********
mood of the day
I met a person from my old days, and the following poem is the result of that meeting. Hope it's good. ( I kind of like it, but maybe I am biased.) :)
photo by clarita
more images from morguefile
my old sergeant
my old sergeant
calls to me
from a bus stop.
he still remembers me
maybe i am the nerdy one
or
i don't give him trouble.
we talk
and laugh.
we are old men now
how time has aged a soldier,
he walks with a cane today.
was it not long ago
i saw him dismount
from an armoured carrier
carbine slung across
his chest
walking through a haze
of red dust
churned up
by battle vehicles?
we talk
about the old days.
we laugh
cough a bit
and then
go about our
separate ways.
19/10/07
********
mood of the day
Labels: Friendship, Poetry, soldiers
posted by dsnake1 at 3:01 PM
19 Comments:
it capture both
the now
and
the then
i like it too
(and i'm not biased) :)
a lovely nostalgic piece.
this is true through the world. you could see the same story of people in the U.S. Army. Wonderful!!
floots,
thanks! yes, that's it, the now and the then. :)
polona,
thanks for the kind words. :)
andrew,
that's true, i think this camaraderie is universal for those who have served.
and the bubble bursts....
beautiful
magiceye,
thanks! :)
I am biased and I like and relate all too well!!
The starkness of the imagery in the flashback in the fourth stanza -- an effective contrast to the tranquillity of the rest of the piece. The sense of brotherhood here is indeed a strong and lasting 'tie that binds'.
Oh how nice for you both!
You deftly conveyed the serendipity as well as the lifelong connections
and passage of time.
Hope you run into each other again.
pat,
i am glad you are biased. :)
hi soulless,
thanks for visiting! :)
i guess the imagery works! i was trying to contrast the swashbuckling old days with the tranquil pace of now.
If you don't mind, i would like to link your blog here. :)
gel,
thank you! :)
it was a wonderful moment. there was so much to talk. I found out that he lives near my workplace, so yes,there will be chances for us to run into each other again.
Hey, you are not biased at all. I like it!
That's great that you two can get together again! :)-
Gel
gautami,
thanks!
but i still think i am a bit biased. :)
GEL,
thank you! :)
Hullo again. I certainly won't mind the link; it would be an honor. I'll be doing the same and will be dropping by for updates on your site. I enjoy the read. ^_^
_soulless_,
thanks!
wow...nice one! Love the juxtaposition and the contrast of the past and the now...nicely captured bro! enjoyed it, thank you!
thank you, EP.
yah, i was trying to paint a contrast between the past and the now, and i guess it works. :)
I like this poem a lot. Glad you are still keeping up your blog. So many from the image prompting days are are either shut down, standing idle or have been designated "private". Keep up your good and worthy work!
Rick Mobbs
hey Rick, glad to hear from you again. ah, those image prompting days are so fun. :)
this poem is one of my personal favourites.
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