birthday
If we could turn back the clock...
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birthday
on this day
we would be drinking,
of course.
your cocktails,
my beer.
maybe even pub crawl
if we are
feeling rich.
then again
perhaps just a burger
at mcdonald's
and we would
light our cigarettes
blowing smoke rings
in the night
my hands on
your slim waist
and you would giggle
your girlish giggle
knowing
what i want.
on this day
we would...
21/09/07
********
mood of the day
image enhanced by dsnake1
from a photo from visipix.com
birthday
on this day
we would be drinking,
of course.
your cocktails,
my beer.
maybe even pub crawl
if we are
feeling rich.
then again
perhaps just a burger
at mcdonald's
and we would
light our cigarettes
blowing smoke rings
in the night
my hands on
your slim waist
and you would giggle
your girlish giggle
knowing
what i want.
on this day
we would...
21/09/07
********
mood of the day
posted by dsnake1 at 10:13 PM
12 Comments:
so sad and so lovely
my heart goes out to you
as floots says, so lovely and sad...
take care!
powerful!
floots, polona, & andrew,
thanks, folks!
this poem was written in a very short span of time. a flash of inspiration, i may add. hardly much editing, almost like the first draft on paper. somehow, drawing on past memories inspires.
looks like my creative energies are back. :)
thoughtful too...
:)
i always remember the little crazy things we used to do.
i like the part about mcdonald's because at that time we were not well-off.
Deceptively simple, but not one word too many, punchy, and truly melancholy.
Great stuff again, Dr Snake :)
hehe, when did i have a doctorate? :)
"not one word too many" : i like that, Ario. :) i think my better poems are mostly quite brief.
cheers! to wonderful memories!
magiceye,
thanks! yes, to wonderful memories!
Yr mushy poems never fails dsnake...they're truly heartfelt lovely. I love the part about mcdonalds. Thnk I'll get myself one now...
excuse me!
hey EP, long time no see. :D
my mushy poems never fails, is it? gotta write more. :) i like the part about mcdonalds too, there's a lot of interpretations in those few words..
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