Sunday, September 23, 2007

birthday

If we could turn back the clock...

water lilies
image enhanced by dsnake1
from a photo from visipix.com



birthday



on this day
we would be drinking,
of course.
your cocktails,
my beer.

maybe even pub crawl
if we are
feeling rich.

then again
perhaps just a burger
at mcdonald's

and we would
light our cigarettes
blowing smoke rings
in the night

my hands on
your slim waist
and you would giggle
your girlish giggle
knowing
what i want.

on this day
we would...


21/09/07
********


mood of the day
the mood is mushy

Labels: , ,

12 Comments:

Blogger floots said...

so sad and so lovely
my heart goes out to you

23 September, 2007 22:59  
Blogger polona said...

as floots says, so lovely and sad...
take care!

24 September, 2007 03:02  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

powerful!

24 September, 2007 12:40  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

floots, polona, & andrew,
thanks, folks!
this poem was written in a very short span of time. a flash of inspiration, i may add. hardly much editing, almost like the first draft on paper. somehow, drawing on past memories inspires.

looks like my creative energies are back. :)

24 September, 2007 21:39  
Blogger gautami tripathy said...

thoughtful too...

25 September, 2007 02:26  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

:)

i always remember the little crazy things we used to do.

i like the part about mcdonald's because at that time we were not well-off.

25 September, 2007 11:57  
Anonymous reluctant scribe said...

Deceptively simple, but not one word too many, punchy, and truly melancholy.

Great stuff again, Dr Snake :)

26 September, 2007 14:46  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hehe, when did i have a doctorate? :)

"not one word too many" : i like that, Ario. :) i think my better poems are mostly quite brief.

26 September, 2007 23:39  
Blogger magiceye said...

cheers! to wonderful memories!

29 September, 2007 13:53  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

magiceye,
thanks! yes, to wonderful memories!

30 September, 2007 23:38  
Blogger Medusa aka expiringpoet said...

Yr mushy poems never fails dsnake...they're truly heartfelt lovely. I love the part about mcdonalds. Thnk I'll get myself one now...

excuse me!

03 November, 2007 12:01  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hey EP, long time no see. :D

my mushy poems never fails, is it? gotta write more. :) i like the part about mcdonalds too, there's a lot of interpretations in those few words..

03 November, 2007 23:11  

Post a Comment

<< Home