Saturday, April 28, 2007

April kukai : Bridge

My entry in haikuworld's April Free Format kukai didn't do too well (or too bad either). 10th out of 18 places, with 9 points. The theme was "Bridge". A bridge too far, perhaps? :)

While waiting for the muse to return......



Bridge at night
image by dsnake1

Bridge


below the bridge
sunken moon dancing
with city lights


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14 Comments:

Blogger gautami tripathy said...

You are climbing up. So nothing to worry about. I like it. And the sketch. You are too good in sketching.

The muse will return. Don't worry much much about it.

29 April, 2007 08:59  
Blogger Bluesky_Liz said...

Nice sketch and fitting haiku.

I can't write a haiku to save my life.

29 April, 2007 14:12  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

gautami, thank you!

i think i will try to participate in every kukai they organise.

ah, sketching. just doing what i like to do. :)

liz,
you haven't given it a try yet. :)
modern English haiku need not follow strictly the 5-7-5 syllables structure. (i just learnt that too.) :)

once on TV i saw a Japanese poetess wrote a haiku (strict structure there!)in her language. The calligraphy itself is pure art...

29 April, 2007 21:33  
Blogger magiceye said...

surreptitious love

29 April, 2007 22:21  
Blogger floots said...

well i like words and pic
(i should've judged it) :)

30 April, 2007 02:09  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

I can see the moon and city lights kicking up there heels all the way to dawn. Inching your way to the top. With haiku like this it won't take long.

30 April, 2007 03:31  
Blogger polona said...

it is a delightful haiku and it was in the 8th, not 10th place :)
that's pretty good, dsnake1...

(my kigo entry did much worse; free format made it to 5th)

30 April, 2007 03:49  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

magiceye,
"surreptitious love"? :)
are you referring to the moon who's always bugging the city lights? :)

floots,
that would be splendid! :)

pat,
you are flatterring me. :)

hi polona,
thank you!
10th place is correct. There's an error in the ranking, 8th was counted twice. :)

i haven't try the kigo entry yet. most of the entries are very good. :)

30 April, 2007 22:10  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

very nice! I used the moon in a haiga tonight, too.

02 May, 2007 12:54  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thanks, andrew.
you have a very lovely haiga over there. :)

02 May, 2007 22:26  
Anonymous alson said...

Do you think "dances" would be better? :)

03 May, 2007 02:27  
Blogger magiceye said...

dsnake1
yes was referring to the 'sunken moon' dancing with 'city lights'! :)

beautifully visualised and presented inded!

03 May, 2007 17:27  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hey alson, thanks for the suggestion!
i believe it works too. i opt for "dancing" because i like the reader to think that the action is still going on when he looks down the bridge. :D

magiceye,
thank you, friend! :)

03 May, 2007 23:48  
Anonymous Mrena said...

People should read this.

11 November, 2008 08:44  

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