Sunday, March 25, 2007

Re-post : dawn comes (noisily)

It was a stock market at the office this week. Ran out of time. Ran out of ideas, ran out of gas.

So I will make do with another re-post, an old poem I wrote long ago, and which I had the audacity to submit to a national poetry competition. :)



image by dsnake1



dawn comes (noisily)


Six o'clock

The night sky daintily lifts its veil
& blotches of iron-grey smear
like peeling paint on an ancient wall
as cauliflowers of dark clouds
     splash around
         like flak.

No rooster crow
this is the city
but dawn comes noisily
sporadic janglings
rouse struggling brains
& carried over the morning air
     throats clearing
     bawling
     & somewhere a metal plate falling

On the streets below
smoke-belching buses
toil through overworked gears
never sleeps
and people scurrying through
     hard streets
     feet wearing asphalt
sleepwalking
to factories to schools to ports


Seven o'clock

The street lamps
sodium sentinels of the night
extinguishing
the duty guards
dismissing.



*** 01-08-1988 ***

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11 Comments:

Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I'm glad you put this on one -- did it win anything? very nice

25 March, 2007 14:35  
Blogger magiceye said...

the onset of urban chaos!!!! wonderful!

25 March, 2007 20:30  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Methinks you have reason to be audacious!! Very fine poem!!

25 March, 2007 20:54  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

andrew,
it was part of a set of 8 poems which i submitted to the competition. Entitled "Landscapes", it was to depict 8 scenes from dawn till dusk. No, it didn't win anything. :)

i am working on a set of poems which i am thinking of submitting to this year's competition.

hi magiceye
haha, "urban chaos", i like that! :)

pat,
when i submitted the entries, it was after i just took up writing again after a long hiatus. so i guess it's a bit audacious. :)
five years on and now i'm more comfortable with words.

25 March, 2007 21:59  
Blogger polona said...

i like this... you're good at depicting the urban ambiance.

26 March, 2007 01:52  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Its been awhile ..I dont take time to be here

Your poem is so lovely ..u go ahead and participate

Thanks
Nasra

26 March, 2007 02:17  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi polona,
that's why this blog's called "urban poems?" :D

hi nasra,
the pieces are still pretty much "in progress", so i don't know if i can complete them in time...:)

27 March, 2007 23:13  
Blogger gautami tripathy said...

I am glad I am geeting to read your old poems. Very beautiful depiction...

As I said before, you are an "Urban" person...

28 March, 2007 19:02  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

gautami,
:)
thank you. maybe it's easier to write about an environment you are familiar with. :)

28 March, 2007 20:38  
Blogger floots said...

i commented on this before but i guess blogger ate it
loved "sodium sentinels of the night"
great urban images throughout
cheers

29 March, 2007 17:46  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Blogger likes to eat poets' posts,
they are more tasty. :)

thank you, floots.

30 March, 2007 00:11  

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