Re-post : dawn comes (noisily)
So I will make do with another re-post, an old poem I wrote long ago, and which I had the audacity to submit to a national poetry competition. :)
image by dsnake1
dawn comes (noisily)
Six o'clock
The night sky daintily lifts its veil
& blotches of iron-grey smear
like peeling paint on an ancient wall
as cauliflowers of dark clouds
splash around
like flak.
No rooster crow
this is the city
but dawn comes noisily
sporadic janglings
rouse struggling brains
& carried over the morning air
throats clearing
bawling
& somewhere a metal plate falling
On the streets below
smoke-belching buses
toil through overworked gears
never sleeps
and people scurrying through
hard streets
feet wearing asphalt
sleepwalking
to factories to schools to ports
Seven o'clock
The street lamps
sodium sentinels of the night
extinguishing
the duty guards
dismissing.
*** 01-08-1988 ***
11 Comments:
I'm glad you put this on one -- did it win anything? very nice
the onset of urban chaos!!!! wonderful!
Methinks you have reason to be audacious!! Very fine poem!!
andrew,
it was part of a set of 8 poems which i submitted to the competition. Entitled "Landscapes", it was to depict 8 scenes from dawn till dusk. No, it didn't win anything. :)
i am working on a set of poems which i am thinking of submitting to this year's competition.
hi magiceye
haha, "urban chaos", i like that! :)
pat,
when i submitted the entries, it was after i just took up writing again after a long hiatus. so i guess it's a bit audacious. :)
five years on and now i'm more comfortable with words.
i like this... you're good at depicting the urban ambiance.
Its been awhile ..I dont take time to be here
Your poem is so lovely ..u go ahead and participate
Thanks
Nasra
hi polona,
that's why this blog's called "urban poems?" :D
hi nasra,
the pieces are still pretty much "in progress", so i don't know if i can complete them in time...:)
I am glad I am geeting to read your old poems. Very beautiful depiction...
As I said before, you are an "Urban" person...
gautami,
:)
thank you. maybe it's easier to write about an environment you are familiar with. :)
i commented on this before but i guess blogger ate it
loved "sodium sentinels of the night"
great urban images throughout
cheers
Blogger likes to eat poets' posts,
they are more tasty. :)
thank you, floots.
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