Thursday, May 25, 2006

Photo-Poetry Challenge : Photo 5

After a few drafts on kites, model airplanes, fighter jets and the history of flight, I settled on an old legend.

This is one of my few attempts on verse, written in a very short span of time. And somwhow I quite like this piece.


I Believe I Can Fly
image from internet, source unknown

Icarus's Song

I believe I can fly
To soar on Pegasus's wings
See the hills from miles high
And sing with the wind.

I believe I can soar
To kiss the sun's face
Arc through thunder's roar
The peregrines I will race.

I believe I will fly
Take my leap into space
When these waxed feathers dry
And be free once again



Blogger ericlow said...

eh, u need some punctuations. :) plus i think ur photo 4 "beach" is much better.


25 May, 2006 21:56  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi eric,
punctuations again, eh? Seems i keep losing them. :)

26 May, 2006 00:15  
Blogger Medusa aka expiringpoet said...

I've recently come to the realization that its tough to bring fresh angles when writing about mythical characters, esp wrt overly-famous legends such as Icarus. I'll just come rite out and say this one is not likely to be in one of my favourites-list of works out of you.

26 May, 2006 01:43  
Blogger Cold Cut Ten said...

The first lines of each strophe is too much like that R. Kelly song for me, which incidently is titled: 'I Believe I Can Fly'.

Loved these lines though:
"Arc through thunder's roar
The peregrines I will race."

Write on, dsnake!

26 May, 2006 10:33  
Blogger ericlow said...

2nd time i told u about punctuations ah? hahaha. dun i sound naggy? :) also eh, icarus and pegasus story a bit far in terms of connections, no? hee. coincidentally, i also used icarus and the theme of flying in one of my recent poem-thing.

26 May, 2006 14:44  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

i promise to write a better one next time. :)

maybe i did hear of that song before, but my interest is in obscure rock songs. :)

thanks for your encouragement!

naggy? nah! thanks for your feedback. it shows my piece interests you. i remembered your 4-flip test, hehe!

your poem-thing you mentioned, is it your "Theories on Flight"? it's leagues ahead of this one i posted! :)

27 May, 2006 20:39  
Blogger ericlow said...

u have an interesting distinguishable poetic voice that could be developed, given time. that's pipping my interest. but u really do need to read a lot more.

yea icarus in theories flight, have this recent urge to use mythology.

28 May, 2006 11:23  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thanks, eric.
maybe i am not reading as much as i used to in the past. the work in the office is killing it. :)

i like to write about tangible stuff, images, drawing from my own experiences. that poetic voice, i think i can detect it, but not sure how to develop it. maybe just continue to write like.....myself

28 May, 2006 18:05  

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