Photo-Poetry Challenge : Photo 5
After a few drafts on kites, model airplanes, fighter jets and the history of flight, I settled on an old legend.
This is one of my few attempts on verse, written in a very short span of time. And somwhow I quite like this piece.
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image from internet, source unknown
Icarus's Song
I believe I can fly
To soar on Pegasus's wings
See the hills from miles high
And sing with the wind.
I believe I can soar
To kiss the sun's face
Arc through thunder's roar
The peregrines I will race.
I believe I will fly
Take my leap into space
When these waxed feathers dry
And be free once again
23.05.06
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This is one of my few attempts on verse, written in a very short span of time. And somwhow I quite like this piece.
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image from internet, source unknown
Icarus's Song
I believe I can fly
To soar on Pegasus's wings
See the hills from miles high
And sing with the wind.
I believe I can soar
To kiss the sun's face
Arc through thunder's roar
The peregrines I will race.
I believe I will fly
Take my leap into space
When these waxed feathers dry
And be free once again
23.05.06
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posted by dsnake1 at 9:06 PM
8 Comments:
eh, u need some punctuations. :) plus i think ur photo 4 "beach" is much better.
eric
hi eric,
punctuations again, eh? Seems i keep losing them. :)
I've recently come to the realization that its tough to bring fresh angles when writing about mythical characters, esp wrt overly-famous legends such as Icarus. I'll just come rite out and say this one is not likely to be in one of my favourites-list of works out of you.
The first lines of each strophe is too much like that R. Kelly song for me, which incidently is titled: 'I Believe I Can Fly'.
Loved these lines though:
"Arc through thunder's roar
The peregrines I will race."
Write on, dsnake!
2nd time i told u about punctuations ah? hahaha. dun i sound naggy? :) also eh, icarus and pegasus story a bit far in terms of connections, no? hee. coincidentally, i also used icarus and the theme of flying in one of my recent poem-thing.
medusa,
i promise to write a better one next time. :)
Liz,
maybe i did hear of that song before, but my interest is in obscure rock songs. :)
thanks for your encouragement!
eric,
naggy? nah! thanks for your feedback. it shows my piece interests you. i remembered your 4-flip test, hehe!
your poem-thing you mentioned, is it your "Theories on Flight"? it's leagues ahead of this one i posted! :)
u have an interesting distinguishable poetic voice that could be developed, given time. that's pipping my interest. but u really do need to read a lot more.
yea icarus in theories flight, have this recent urge to use mythology.
thanks, eric.
maybe i am not reading as much as i used to in the past. the work in the office is killing it. :)
i like to write about tangible stuff, images, drawing from my own experiences. that poetic voice, i think i can detect it, but not sure how to develop it. maybe just continue to write like.....myself
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