Sunday, October 10, 2021

heavy metal

"even as the magpies
flapped in
from the storm"

- dsnake1, november rains.

photo by lee junda at Unsplash

heavy metal

the sky was rocking
heavy metal,
clouds bruised
blue black,
as white light slashed
across its face
it growled
as in pain.

i leaned at the window
as my cigarette smoke
curled outside
to die
in the rain.


This poem is a repost. It was published here in 2006. It was one of my favourite poems then, and still is.

Linked to : Writer's Pantry #91

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© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2021

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Blogger Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Yummy! It deserves to be one of your favourites; it's a beaut (as we say in Australia). It's so good it gives me shivers and makes my teeth curl.

10 October, 2021 21:21  
Blogger Khaya Ronkainen said...

Quite a vivid imagery. Well written!

10 October, 2021 21:41  
Blogger Rommy said...

*raises the horns*
Sometimes the music needs room to be loud and rage, especially when we must be silent elsewhere.

10 October, 2021 22:15  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


yes, it was one of those poems that 'wrote itself'. It was a long time ago, and i remembered i was at my apartment window watching this storm brewing.


Thank you! :)


yes, like it's at a really wild rock concert! :)

10 October, 2021 22:26  
Blogger indybev said...

I can see why it's a favorite. It's a beautiful bit of the realism Rosemary has described.

10 October, 2021 22:44  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Thank you, Beverly! :)

10 October, 2021 23:19  
Blogger Magaly Guerrero said...

Love your word choices, the images they storm into being, the play of light and dark...

11 October, 2021 01:46  
Blogger Helen said...

... and this will be one of my favorites. Beautifully composed. November quickly coming.

11 October, 2021 02:49  
Blogger A Cuban In London said...

The last stanza is a beauty. Even though I don't smoke. :-)

11 October, 2021 03:47  
Blogger Graham Lester said...

Captures a moment so succinctly. Great description of the weather.

11 October, 2021 05:18  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Nice images Cheong Lee san


11 October, 2021 06:06  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


Thank you, glad you like the poem. :)


Thank you!
how fast time flies. :)


Thank you!

11 October, 2021 12:20  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


Thank you!


glad to see you. :)

11 October, 2021 12:45  
Blogger ashok said...

Stunning image and equally stunning poem

24 October, 2021 17:52  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Thank you, Ashok! :)

24 October, 2021 19:38  

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