a poem with no 'E's
Some years back, at a local poetry forum where I used to hang out, there was a challenge to write a poem without the vowel 'E'. I thought, wow, it must be difficult. It was. But I managed to write one. I wasn't too satisfied with the original and did an edit on it. Below is the result.
I wonder if any of you have written a poem without 'E'. I am thinking of writing a poem each without an a, i , o and u, but the thought of writing one is already pretty scary. :)
image by dsnake1
coming home
midnight
at my corridor
i
thought i saw things
unholy
a shadow
gliding
at a lift landing
as a dog howls,
primordial,
distant
barking at
a sky of rusty slag
bulging
with a storm
a wind mobilizing
X-wings
swooping in
on dim corridors
in
attack flights
as i turn
a lock
on my door
and walk
into a warm room
to my child
hugging a pikachu
smiling
waiting
for daddy.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
08.07.05
revised 26.04.07
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"Not happy? Okay, stand up and fight!"
-- dsnake1, a quote with no 'E'.
Shared on Poetry Pantry #170 at Poets United
photo by dsnake1
Sherry, this is for you. The blue sky I mentioned in your comment. Taken near my home today. :)
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2013
I wonder if any of you have written a poem without 'E'. I am thinking of writing a poem each without an a, i , o and u, but the thought of writing one is already pretty scary. :)
image by dsnake1
coming home
midnight
at my corridor
i
thought i saw things
unholy
a shadow
gliding
at a lift landing
as a dog howls,
primordial,
distant
barking at
a sky of rusty slag
bulging
with a storm
a wind mobilizing
X-wings
swooping in
on dim corridors
in
attack flights
as i turn
a lock
on my door
and walk
into a warm room
to my child
hugging a pikachu
smiling
waiting
for daddy.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
08.07.05
revised 26.04.07
****************
"Not happy? Okay, stand up and fight!"
-- dsnake1, a quote with no 'E'.
Shared on Poetry Pantry #170 at Poets United
Sherry, this is for you. The blue sky I mentioned in your comment. Taken near my home today. :)
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2013
Labels: challenge, heartlands, landscape, line breaks, lovesongs, Poetry, Poetry exercise
posted by dsnake1 at 11:36 PM
20 Comments:
sweet ending..arriving home to happy child...nice line breaks and tension in the opening...i have never written about a single letter....hmmm i will give that some thought....
how clever - i'm not sure i quite believed it could be done (even the 'e' in the title is there on sufferance) ;) - & it's a lovely story as well
Intriguing and beautiful. I didn't miss the "e" at all. :)
Never thought about writing without E, you have done it well:)
Wow, this is great. I am totally awed by your accomplishment. I wouldn't even think of attempting it!! And it had meaning even.....heavens, I can't even write a sentence without an 'e.'
I have never written without my beloved eees--you did a wonderful job--great moody piece
I love the feeling these pictures you paint leave behind..somewhat haunting.
I never thought of writing a poem without an e, I must say you did a marvelous job. Love your close.
W*ll, you'r* right! No stinkin' *E ... then again, it read so well I wasn't lookin' :-) and I took your "word" for it.
ZQ
this is a fantastic response to a harrowing challenge
Wow, kiddo, this is amazing. What an unusual prompt and look how you rose to it - I cant imagine writing a poem that long without a particular vowel. You made it look easy and I know it isnt. Thanks for the blue sky, too, kiddo. I needed that tonight. We have wind kicking up and big fat rainclouds getting ready to bucket down on us.......the blue of your sky is amazing!
Brian,
you should give it a try. it's quite challenging. :)
rudyan,
i am not quite sure how i did it either. :)
oh no! there's an E in the title!
TALON,
you didn't miss the 'e' at all? wow!
Vandana,
thank you! it wasn't easy. :)
Mary,
i am sure you can give it a try. :)
Audrey,
beloved eees? essential eees! :)
Natasa,
yes, i started the poem rather darkly.
Lisa,
thank you! the ending is a contrast with the rest of the poem. :)
ZQ,
my friend, you trusted me too much. There's an 'e' in the title!
now, what happened to my proofreading?
grapeling,
harrowing challenge it is. :(
Sherry,
it's not easy, really.
i have to take that picture with my cell phone. the sky was a very brilliant blue. :)
An interesting challenge to take on, but you handled it well. Great piece. I am now tempted to try to write a poem "e" free. Considering the number of times I used the vowel in this post alone, it's obvious it's a difficult task.
:)
have a bash at it!
U did it. U actually did it!
wow, no e in the comment. :)
Curses! Dag-nabit! An E In the "title" did you get an A- instead of an A+ for that little faux-pas? :-)
ooh, dang!
:D
Good one !
Thank you, Ashok! 😀
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