Sunday, September 07, 2008

what's left

This poem was published in the e-zine Concelebratory Shoehorn Review

I wrote this poem on one wet evening, after a bad day in the office. It's understandable why the mood is dark. :)

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what's left

what's left
of the sunlight
on this bleak
wet evening
dances on
the gleaming
skins of
puddles on
bare pavements

as shadows chase
the day
up the
stone piers
of train viaducts
and the
damp trunks
of rain trees.

what are the
chances of
the silvery slice
of cold moon
cutting through
grey nimbus
like a scimitar?

until then
the last rays
dip and play
and dart
over the city

over the trains
pulling into
the stations


the tired
hungry masses
trudging home.


© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 )

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Anonymous Anonymous said...

With the bleak mood that I have now, this suits me fine. It seems nothing is left....anymore...

07 September, 2008 22:16  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hey gautami

take care. this phase you are feeling will go away, we do run out of words or ideas, or we lose our voices sometimes. You will bounce back, i know. :)
presently the workload in my office is insane, thus my big gripe here.

08 September, 2008 00:49  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I love the mood in this one! well said!

09 September, 2008 11:50  
Blogger magiceye said...

beautifully dark!

09 September, 2008 21:33  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


thank you! the words to this piece came to me one wet evening on my way home from work. probably the mood helps. :)


the mood was dark when i wrote this... :)

09 September, 2008 21:45  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

How touching even though it feel bleak yet is so moving beautiful


10 September, 2008 03:05  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hi Nasra,

it's great to hear from you! :)

10 September, 2008 23:18  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

re."wet evening"- the best things I've written were done in rain. know what you mean.
(I don't need more weather like last night, though! you should see my weather blog. :)

15 September, 2008 11:58  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


andrew, i wrote this poem in december last year. december is usually our wettest month here.

i read about hurricane Ike hitting Texas but it reached Arkansas too? i took a look at your weather blog, and wow!, the storm in your area must be pretty rough too.

15 September, 2008 23:00  
Blogger susan said...

I enjoy your work. Always impressed when I come here. And by the way, here to invite you to let others know about your work:

Have you posted a poem, short shorty, essay or some visual art that just didn't get the love you'd hoped? We share our work and hope others enjoy it. Online, comments let us know our work has been read and appreciated.

To celebrate older posts that got zero or few comments, leave a link at Little Lovin’ Mondays, hosted by Susan at Black-eyed Susan’s. And to show even greater appreciation for your fellow bloggers, how about commenting to a new piece while you there.

16 September, 2008 07:44  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


Susan, thanks for the invite. I think it's a great idea you have there, and I would like to participate. Yes, I have posts where there are zero or few comments ( especially when i started to post on-line a couple of years back). I have used some of those earlier pieces as re-posts (good when i run out of ideas :D). Having a platform where bloggers can share their works will make their efforts more interesting and worthwhile.

I hope to contribute to Little Lovin' Mondays soon. :)

17 September, 2008 00:43  
Blogger polona said...

the mood may be bleak but it is a beautiful piece.

23 September, 2008 01:04  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


i see you are back from your vacation. :)

23 September, 2008 21:12  
Blogger S.L. Corsua said...

This has got to be one of my favorite urban poems of yours. Every image is in place; I could step into the scene in my head, and just let my senses roam. (What can I say, I like observing people; it's a habit.) ;) Cheers.

02 October, 2008 16:26  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, s.l. :)

there are a number of poems i have written, that in my opinion, are a cut above the rest. this one is one of them. it may not be technically perfect, but i think it scores on the visuals and emotions.

glad you like this work. btw, i like observing people too. it can be a source of inspiration for your writing. :)

02 October, 2008 19:05  

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