Sunday, March 18, 2007

words on a dusty pane

After a year and a half of blogging, I guess it is time to change the blog's title.

"urban poems" is ok, but I am mindful that I am still a minor writer. You may find the blog's new title somewhere within the following poem. But then again, I may not change it, I have grown fond of "urban poems". Heck, what am I talking, it must be the office work driving me nuts....

This piece is about a certain district I once lived in...

image by dsnake1

words on a dusty pane

circa 1970s, Kallang

Outside, the city lurches by
in frames of moving headlights
and mottled skies.

tonight there are no screams
from the shadows of concrete,
no clash of metal blades, no sirens.

through the windows the night
snakes in choking with prejudice
and soot from dying sawmills

when hours earlier the rain
had pelted the decaying streets
like swarms of stinging wasps.

soon it will be dawn,
the first slivers of light
promising hope

painting peeling walls
and rusted steel
with bold strokes of liquid gold,

shinning through
angry words
on a dusty pane.



Blogger polona said...

wow, a mood masterfully depicted!
love the ending...

19 March, 2007 01:19  
Blogger floots said...

great sense of atmosphere
and i agree with polona re the ending

19 March, 2007 13:53  
Blogger magiceye said...

lyrically beautiful

19 March, 2007 15:56  
Blogger gautami tripathy said...

I walked through that district with this poem. I think urban poems suits your blog.

My two penny worth, dsnake1.

19 March, 2007 23:05  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thanks, it's a moody piece. :)

thank you!


i will stick to the old title for the time being. :)
I am very busy lately and won't have time to design a new header and all that. :D

i think most big cities have districts like that.

20 March, 2007 20:22  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

powerful!!! thanks

21 March, 2007 12:48  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

I don't think you should change the title, you really do write poems of urban settings. If anyone can claim to write urban poems, it's you.

- Liz

21 March, 2007 16:55  
Anonymous Gel (emerald eyes) said...

This blew me away, dsnake.
Powerfully written. Love the ambience. One of your best.

I also like the execution of your drawing. It has an airy and somewhat mysterious feel to it. Nice work.

(As for the blog title, whatever you like is the title to keep or change. It's your blog. I'll come by whatever title it is.)

21 March, 2007 19:31  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you.
it was a very busy week at work and i couldn't spend as much time at the home PC as i liked. :)

yeah, as i had wrote in the intro, i have grown rather fond of "urban poems". guess i will stick with it for the time being. :)

i am thinking of sending this piece to QLRS.

hi GEL,
always welcome your comments!

about the artwork, it's a pencil drawing on art paper, then the surface was rubbed with a tissue paper to achieve that "airy" effect. glad you like the picture. :)

21 March, 2007 20:51  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

WOW!! Fantastic poem!! I don't see anything minor is this piece.

21 March, 2007 20:53  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

a wow from pat is always welcome. :)

22 March, 2007 22:54  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

p.s.- I like "urban poems" -- maybe "urban poet"?

23 March, 2007 12:30  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

worth a thought, yes. :)

24 March, 2007 17:37  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

>>i am thinking of sending this piece to QLRS.

I think you should do it.

28 March, 2007 13:53  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi anon,
thanks for the encouragement..:)

28 March, 2007 20:40  

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