Saturday, July 08, 2006

Photo-Poetry Challenge: Photo 9

More gloomy stuff. People will be avoiding this blog soon if this carries on..

And with this, the Photo-Poetry Challenge is completed, although this piece has passed the deadline. It was quite a , well, challenge doing it, but good exercise too. What's next?


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The Shoes
image by LazerLordz


After the girl had jumped from the roof

After the girl had jumped from the roof,
after the forensic techies had taken the photos
and measured the point of impact

and the police had set up a cordon and
kept the neighbourhood hounds at bay,
that there was a suicide note on her and the rumours

buzzed around, it was a boy, no it was her studies,
after the undertakers had carted her to the morgue
hauling the body bag like a load of rubbish,

as the cleaners were jet-spraying the blood off the concrete
and the grass where she had laid like in slumber,
someone found her shoes in the void deck

neatly stacked,
arranged,

as if she was
      about
         to leave
              home.

05/07/06
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15 Comments:

Blogger Medusa aka expiringpoet said...

Wow congrats man...no mean feat; I salute your effort seeing this challenge through.
Yeah, what's next? Poem about the Italy victory??? Lots of drama there definitely worth writing about eh? :)

Go dsnake!!!!

10 July, 2006 15:30  
Blogger floots said...

builds up to a terrible sense of loss thanks to the bathos in those last few words
well done

10 July, 2006 15:35  
Blogger ME Strauss said...

The last few words will rest in my mind for a long time. The imagery is so strong and tender. They conjur up the girl for me.

10 July, 2006 20:23  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

medusa,
so the gloomy stuff didn't frightened you off?

Thanks for your encouragements.
But i had enough of this world cup!

floots,
thank you!
at first i baulk at posting this piece, but these unfortunate and sad incidents do happen.

10 July, 2006 20:29  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi Liz,
thanks for your comments.
When i read about such things in the papers, sometimes i wonder, is there no other way out.

10 July, 2006 20:34  
Blogger Medusa aka expiringpoet said...

Strange you should ask. But we're all too familiar with the crazy education system in Singapore and the stress it brings onto teachers, students and parents. Its a vicious cycle. I got a chance to teach for a year in a secondary school after I graduated, and the system really turned me off. Its horrible I suppose, for me to say that I'm kinda hardened to it all?

10 July, 2006 20:49  
Blogger Bluesky_Liz said...

Interesting.

Congratulations, you've finished your challenge! *cheers* :D

10 July, 2006 21:54  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

medusa,
i see my kid struggling with her homework and i'm worried. the amount of stuff to study and the pressure to pass. Maybe everyone's expecting too much. everyone's stressed.

liz,
thanks! you are the inspiration for the challenge, remember? :)

11 July, 2006 00:22  
Blogger Medusa aka expiringpoet said...

Can imagine how u feel, its toughest thing being a parent. All I can say is, as long as she's happy n excited about going to school, its a good sign :)
I have so many friends like you...all suffering; worried cos they see their kids struggling.
But actually kids are very adaptable and can cope if the parents love them and give them the positive belief that they can :)
The ones who go under or totally lose it - its cos the parents/school push too hard without caring how the kid is really feeling inside :(

Have faith!

11 July, 2006 17:19  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

yeah friend, you nailed it. i guess a lot of parents are also affected by the system. i never really push her too hard for good grades. as long as she's excited and happy about going to school, and i know she's doing her best, i am happy.

thank you! :)

11 July, 2006 19:49  
Blogger Orso Dorato said...

How truly tragic...kue

14 July, 2006 06:09  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hey orso, where have you been?
pretty busy with your studies and work?

anyway, glad to see you around. :)

14 July, 2006 23:32  
Blogger David E. Patton said...

This is such a wonderful poem with a verry, verry good ending. i enjoyed it a lot.

15 July, 2006 01:30  
Anonymous alson said...

What's next?

Food and Sex?

15 July, 2006 02:25  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

david,
thank you. glad you like it.

alson,
for a poetry exercise?

hmm, let me think. sure attention-grabbing.

15 July, 2006 23:57  

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