wonderland
― Sylvia Plath, The Bell Jar
photo of a sculpture at Gardens By The Bay by dsnake1
wonderland
how long was he there, sleeping, head on the stone table in the void deck, blackbirds pecking at his forgotten boxed lunch?
if your words hurt then touch me, charm me so that the hole i am dropping in won't feel so deep, the rocks no more sharp.
out in the streets, in the weak moonlight, i am trying to find my shadow, the big trucks passing, just two steps away from hell.
and how deep can we sink before we drown, before the lungs fold slowly like accordions and we finally forget how to cry?
if we grow wings we would spread them, jump and fly together, never mind the distances, the abysses and the load
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we carry.
23/11/2020
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Drop's -「月光」(moonlight)
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2021
Labels: 10's, anger, depression, frustration, mood, relationship, urban
17 Comments:
A difficult subject ~~~ a beautiful poem.
This leaves me a bit breathless and wanting to come up for air.
Beautiful deep sad words.
Anna :o]
I really love the part about looking for one's shadow and the lungs folding up like an accordion.
Intriguing – painful yet magical. I love this piece and want to know so much more.
Helen,
Thank you! :)
Beverly,
'breathless'. the poem is working! :)
Anna,
Thank you! :)
Colleen,
Thank you! :)
Rosemary,
Thank you. it's about a stormy relationship, and it is partly autobiographical.
Such a gorgeous write. It has been a while since I have read your work--I forget how beautifully you write--
that lung folding image...
oh the burdens we carry.
That level below the anger, that numbness is such a hard space to inhabit. But there is something, if not exactly hopeful, at least it isn't completely hopeless that is coming through, especially in the wish for wings strong enough to overcome this.
Wow! This is stunning. Each verse following a little more intriguing. And i luv the wrap around ending clause
Thanks for dropping by my blog. Have a good week
Much💖love
Audrey,
Thank you for the visit and the kind words. :)
Brother Ollie,
Thank you!
i like that image too, it's quite hard-hitting. :)
Rommy,
thank you for the comment.
yes, i want the tone of the poem to be not completely dismal and hopeless.
Thank you, Gillena! :)
They say that recognizing that there is a problem is the first step towards a solution. The recognition can be quite painful at times--like this poem shows us--but seeing what is happening is promising. Regardless of how much it hurts to see it.
Thank you, Magaly, for your wonderful comment. true, to solve a problem, one must first recognise that there is a problem. this poem about a relationship is a bit dark and sad, but yes, there's optimism in it too. :)
Lucky are those couples who accept they may have differences but don't make a big issue about it. Love should be much stronger that that.
Robin, relationships can be tricky things, and the worst is the differences get out of control. yes, love should be much stronger than that.
Thank you for the comment. :)
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