spectator
This was a poem which I wrote as an entry for the Moving Words poetry competition recently. It did not make it to the trains or the anthology of poems, so here it is.
I quite like this poem, though.. Sigh.
I am posting this for Thursday Poets Rally Week 57.
photo by terranovesca
image from morguefile.com
spectator
silently
the blackbirds hunch
like paper cut-outs
on the edges
of the rooftops
in the smoky haze
drifting in
from the landfills
watching
the last rays
of the sunset
battling the oncoming
night
08/04/10
********
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ), 2011
I quite like this poem, though.. Sigh.
I am posting this for Thursday Poets Rally Week 57.
photo by terranovesca
image from morguefile.com
spectator
silently
the blackbirds hunch
like paper cut-outs
on the edges
of the rooftops
in the smoky haze
drifting in
from the landfills
watching
the last rays
of the sunset
battling the oncoming
night
08/04/10
********
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ), 2011
Labels: landscape, Poetry, poetry competition, Thursday Poets' Rally
posted by dsnake1 at 9:29 AM
16 Comments:
The silent spectator has been a prevalent theme in some of the books I've been reading of late.
This adds to the list, worthily so.
The blackbirds hunch like paper cut-outs, loved that expression.
Your words paint a picture of the evening.
Amropali
such a coincidence! thanks for visiting, and i am glad you liked the poem. :)
shail,
thanks for visiting, and your comments. :)
stunning lines.
well done,
Thank you, Orange Tree! :)
hunched blackbirds in the sunset...a nice use of metaphor here ~
http://a-sweetlust.blogspot.com/2011/12/unmeasurable.html
thanks, Heaven!
yes, i was actually thinking about my days in the military when i wrote this.:)
blackbirds and the night :) hmm I liked the fumes from the landfills imagery as well (smile)
enjoy the rally!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/12/03/unlike-bound/
this is wonderful!!
lynnaima,
thanks for visiting and leaving your comments.
the fumes from the landfills can be pretty bad. :)
magiceye,
thanks, my friend! :)
good one...well written.
thank you, ashok!
great imagery - that did paint a picture. thanks for visiting my blog.
thank you, Suzy. :)
nice imagery
thanks, zongrik!
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