ROC '76
I am posting this poem for Thursday Poets Rally Week 53.
photo by Athena
ROC '76
In stony silence,
in fits of exhaustion,
we hunched & huddled
in the blood-red mud
& watched the 81s opened up
punishing the hills beyond the ridge.
Not for us the adage of glory and country
but faraway images of home,
a beer, a shower, & a woman to cuddle.
We hunched together
waiting, in a fine drizzle
that coiled around the blue hills,
the final manoeuvre of the battle,
as a haze of gun-smoke and diesel
washed over our tired bodies.
Somewhere to the east,
defiant GPMGs chattered.
As rivulets of rain
flowed down dented helmets
to sweat stained brows,
we struggled with a last smoke.
(have you tried lighting a wet cigarette ?)
We heaved ourselves up
laden with packs and
weapons and fatigue
and coaxed tired limbs
in mud-caked boots
to trudge a final kilometre to base.
09-04-88
revised 05/10/2011
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© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2011
Labels: camaraderie, military, Poetry, Thursday Poets' Rally
11 Comments:
being soldier is life full of sacrifices :) best wishes
As rivulets of rain
flowed down dented helmets
to sweat stained brows,
we struggled with a last smoke.
This stanza is my favorite but I enjoyed the entire poem and felt like I was with you there as there is currently rain pelting my windows.
Thanks for sharing and for fighting for our freedom.
meethimirchi,
thank you! that happened a long time ago. now i am an old, cranky ex soldier. :)
poetryroad,
thank you for the thoughtful comments. i think the camaraderie servicemen shared is a little hard to explain. anyway, the incident i related was a training exercise. :)
best wishes.
Excellent write. Exercise or not, you wrote this in such a way that we were right there with you. The vividness of your words is outstanding. Very well done!
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/05/treasure/
Morning,
thank you so much! :)
Charles,
Thanks! i am glad that you can connect with the poem. :)
Vivid and well written poem.
http://www.jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/
Thank you, Jack. :)
This very visual piece is strong in concrete images and comes off the page as a painting in my head. Thanks for this one.
Namaste..........cj
great imagery!! wow. thank you for sharing this experience. a lot of people try not to think of these days and just want to move on.
my entry
http://zongrik.wordpress.com/2011/10/02/triolet-vi/
cj,
thank you! so it's like a painting in your head? much appreciated. :)
zongrik,
thanks for your insightful comment. :)
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