janice
Do you still remember the first dance you had? I still do, though it happened eons ago. Probably because it's the first time, the partner is pretty, and the music in the right groove.
Anyway, I wrote this for NaPoWriMo 2009, and I am posting this for Poets' Rally Week 50. I hope this post can bring back memories of your first dance too...:)
pencil drawing by dsnake1
janice
always
that dance
it plays
all over
like a jammed vinyl
when i hear
that song
in a store
the train the radio
though it has been
almost
a lifetime
since
we left
and still
like a bridge
across time
i see
just the two
of us
though there are others
on the dance floor
my hand
on your slim waist
your warm body
close to mine
a hint
of heady
perfume
and me
trying very hard
not to step
on your shoes.
14/04/09
revised 23/06/09
****************
Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
Carl Sandburg
And this is the song that still thrills me...
to janice, wherever you are.
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2011
Anyway, I wrote this for NaPoWriMo 2009, and I am posting this for Poets' Rally Week 50. I hope this post can bring back memories of your first dance too...:)
janice
always
that dance
it plays
all over
like a jammed vinyl
when i hear
that song
in a store
the train the radio
though it has been
almost
a lifetime
since
we left
and still
like a bridge
across time
i see
just the two
of us
though there are others
on the dance floor
my hand
on your slim waist
your warm body
close to mine
a hint
of heady
perfume
and me
trying very hard
not to step
on your shoes.
14/04/09
revised 23/06/09
****************
Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
Carl Sandburg
And this is the song that still thrills me...
to janice, wherever you are.
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2011
Labels: lovesongs, Poetry, Thursday Poets' Rally
posted by dsnake1 at 1:09 PM
23 Comments:
Lovely, dsnake. How very innocent and endearing -- a pleasant date with subtle hints of two about to fall in love, and he's trying not to step on her shoes! :) Just can't help but smile at the image of this awkward young man.
Sweet as well as sensual in its innocense!
A sweet nostalgic poem... brings back some good memories.
I like the form too.
Nice to meet you~
Fun poem. Liked hearing the song at the end to complete the image. I love Simon and Garfunkle, but I would have never thought of "Bridge Over Troubled Water" as a first dance song...Interesting, indeed. =)
Hey there! I know this is kind of off topic but I was wondering if you knew where I could find a captcha plugin for my comment form? I'm using the same blog platform as yours and I'm having trouble finding one? Thanks a lot!
Ravenblack,
Thanks! and hello, that awkward guy is me. :) like i said, it happened ages ago, but the incident still sticks in the memories.
poetryroad,
Thanks for visiting and leaving your comments.
innocent, yes, probably. :)
Heaven
Nice to meet you too! i like to use a lot of line breaks, it gives the reader time to pause and breathe. :)
muzzleflashing,
Thanks for visiting! The early 70's weren't known for dance tracks, and "Bridge Over Troubled Water" was certainly not intended as one, but the DJ played it that night and I have my first dance. (if i can call that a dance ) :)
and btw, you have a great website.
Hi anon
i assume you are using blogger.
at your dashboard go to Settings > Comments tabs
then scroll down to "Show word verification for comments?" field and check the "Yes" radio button. Then click "save settings".
this should bring up the captcha. as blog author, you wouldn't see it.
your poem sounds like a soft wave coming towards us, just as the memories of our first dance come and bring in a smile upon us!
http://www.deejusongwriter.blogspot.com
deeju,
thanks for the visit and leaving your comments.
>> " a soft wave coming towards us " : i like that! :)
Adore the last lines, lovely ending.
Fountains,
thank you! the last few lines are supposed to be a twist to the whole poem. looks like it works. :)
Oooo so cute and sweet! Moments that are engraved in your mind forever.
This is so wonderful. I love the words and the presentation. Very sweet. : )
Yes, those magical moments of the "coming of age" last forever in songs!
dandylion,
glad you find it cute. :)
yes, these are moments that are engraved in the mind.
thingy,
thanks for the visit! :)
susan,
thanks for visiting! yes, i was looking for that phrase "coming of age", and you found it for me. :)
I remember my first dance. It was in Sophomore year, Junior High. I had a crush on this girl and asked her for a dance. She was hesitant at first until a Senior made compelled her to dance with me.
I remember how nervous and naive I was on the dance floor.
This brought some good ol' memory.
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers!
Emmanuel,
Thanks for the visit and comments! i remembered i was in secondary school then (equivalent to your junior high, i think) . it was at a birthday party of one of my sister's friends. i was really nervous, but still managed to strike up a conversation. we went out a few times after that, but that's about all.
i am glad this brought back some good memories for you. :)
Such a sweet poem and brings back memories. My entry this week is http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/01/life-memories/
Ann,
thanks for your comments. :)
Warm and meaningful. Very, very nice. Thank you!
Kay,
thanks for the visit and your kind comments. :)
Beautiful work of creativity!
Take care
Marinela
Marinela, thank you!
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