A poem with no 'E's
Some time back, the poetry forum where I used to hang out organised a poetry exercise where the members were asked to write a poem without the vowel 'E'.
I wrote one, but I guessed it wasn't too good. I was trying too hard! Recently I took out the original, polished it up a bit, (come to think of it, it's almost a total redo), and here it is, a poem with no 'e's. :)
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coming back
midnight
at my corridor
i
thought i saw things
unholy
a shadow
gliding
at a lift landing
as a dog howls,
primordial,
distant
barking at
a sky of rusty slag
bulging
with a storm
a wind mobilizing
X-wings
swooping in
on dim corridors
in
attack flights
as i turn
a lock
on my door
and walk
into a warm room
to my child
hugging a pikachu
smiling
waiting
for daddy.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
08.07.05
revised 26.04.07
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I wanted the title to be "coming home", but no 'e's, you know.
I would love to do a sketch too, but it's hard to draw dim corridors or x-wings. Truth is, I am a bit lazy this week. :)
I wrote one, but I guessed it wasn't too good. I was trying too hard! Recently I took out the original, polished it up a bit, (come to think of it, it's almost a total redo), and here it is, a poem with no 'e's. :)
image from www.bigfoto.com
coming back
midnight
at my corridor
i
thought i saw things
unholy
a shadow
gliding
at a lift landing
as a dog howls,
primordial,
distant
barking at
a sky of rusty slag
bulging
with a storm
a wind mobilizing
X-wings
swooping in
on dim corridors
in
attack flights
as i turn
a lock
on my door
and walk
into a warm room
to my child
hugging a pikachu
smiling
waiting
for daddy.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
08.07.05
revised 26.04.07
****************
I wanted the title to be "coming home", but no 'e's, you know.
I would love to do a sketch too, but it's hard to draw dim corridors or x-wings. Truth is, I am a bit lazy this week. :)
Labels: Poetry, Poetry exercise
posted by dsnake1 at 5:26 PM
12 Comments:
no e
but lots of ah in that ending
well done
A challenge well met. Kind of like writing a poem with one "vowel" tied behind your back. Good job!!
floots,
thank you. :D
pat,
i like that, a vowel tied behind my back. :) Thanks!
That was good. Spooky feeling but ended well.
wow! love it, dsnake!
Rather comforting at the end of it. :)
- Liz
excellent! effortless! extraordinary! :)
thank you, gautami.
i was trying to evoke a contrast between the chill outside and the warmth inside the room. :)
polona,
thank you! a WOW! from you is always welcome. :)
Liz,
thanks! I am not sure whether you have joined the forum at that time, or you had taken part in the exercise. :)
hi andrew,
so many "e"s? :)
thank you!
Fantastic! (no es) :)
et tu? :)
no 'e's!
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which i am going to deliver in university.
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