Sunday, May 02, 2021

poetry lesson #6

poetry. definitely a love-hate relationship...

pencil sketch by dsnake1

poetry lesson #6

i confess
i am trying to write a poem.

pencil & notebook is ready

trying to pull words
out of a hat

it is like my constipated
self trying to poop


and out of the
angry scrawls on the paper


pick the poem apart
letter by letter
it is painful, watching
like an autopsy

kill the poem! kill it!

you call this poetry, sir?
perhaps the blackbird outside on my air con unit can scratch better than this!

my muse, quick, i need my pretty muse.


Band-Maid - Manners

© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2021

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Blogger Magaly Guerrero said...

All of a sudden, I find myself wanting a full story about the voices in the speaker's head. I suspect that the imagery and suspense would be quite enjoyable.

And I completely understand that sense of not being able to push out on command. It's not the most comfortable of feelings. Where's that muse when she's needed?

02 May, 2021 23:33  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Ha 😊 Writing is sometimes a painful experience. Those self doubt phases are the worse

Happy Sunday Cheong Lee san

Thanks for dropping by to read mine


02 May, 2021 23:44  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


i guess there's a story in there too. probably a bit of an insane story. :)
yeah, where's that muse when she's needed?


Thank you!
you should know too, right? :)

02 May, 2021 23:51  
Blogger Debi Swim said...

That darn muse! She likes to play games.

03 May, 2021 00:17  
Blogger indybev said...

I can identify .... all too often!

03 May, 2021 00:31  
Blogger Helen said...

Your sketches are so delightful .... muse on the way!!!

03 May, 2021 00:36  
Blogger Rommy said...

I admit to having a good giggle at the constipation comparison, because sometimes trying to unleash the right word or phrase feels exactly like that. And oh what a relief when they are finally expelled!

03 May, 2021 06:14  
Blogger Jenna said...

I think you are harsher on your poems than any of us would be. :)

03 May, 2021 06:49  
Blogger Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

I'm sure we can all relate!

A wise friend once suggested, when I was complaining of writer's block, that I might be too busy (with other things). She said, 'The Muse needs quiet in order to be heard.' Just a thought.

03 May, 2021 09:33  
Blogger Jim said...

A fun write, DS. In 2009 I was inscribing the bottom line of my 'poetry writing' once with these lines,
"Painting is easy when you don’t know how, but very difficult when you do. Edgar Dégas
The same may go for poetry? (whatever, I enjoy painting with the words!)"
BTW, your drawing is good. Mine is only in the stick man stage, hasn't moved since grade school. 😁

03 May, 2021 10:43  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


oh, she does! :)


but you can write the most delightful of verses. :)


Thank you! :)

03 May, 2021 14:22  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


i think it is a pretty good comparison. :)


maybe just a little..


your friend's words, i have to keep that in mind.

03 May, 2021 14:35  
Blogger Old Egg said...

Yes! We need that muse alright.

03 May, 2021 14:39  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


Thank you for the Edgar Degas quote. Perhaps this comes with the pressure of living as an artist.
i have always liked drawing and painting while in school, and might have chosen this path if there is no need to put food on the table. Nowadays, i just do pen/pencil sketches and i enjoy doing it. :)

03 May, 2021 14:48  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


yes, and urgently too. :)

03 May, 2021 14:49  
Blogger Kim M. Russell said...

I enjoyed your confessional poem, its honesty, and the familiar situation. I especially identify with the lines:
‘pick the poem apart
letter by letter
it is painful, watching
like an autopsy’.
Wasn’t it Stephen King who said, ‘Kill your darlings’?

03 May, 2021 16:35  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


glad that you liked the poem. and thank you for the Stephen King quote. :)

03 May, 2021 17:01  
Blogger magiceye said...

This is lovely!

04 May, 2021 10:02  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Thank you, magiceye! :)

04 May, 2021 18:37  

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