Monday, May 20, 2013

tired

Ah, another frantic week again.

I wrote this for the recently concluded NaPoWriMo at my other blog. After an awful day, of course.






image from imageafter.com




tired



the leaves of spring fall
because they are too sad
they are too tired to cling on
anymore
for darkness has fallen
even in the mid-day
even the crows
keep their distance
in the bare branches
and shadows hide
in the skins of walls
frozen stiff.


27/04/2013
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"Let me walk a while alone
Among the sacred rocks and stones
Let me look in vain belief
Upon the beauty of each leaf."

-- Uriah Heep, "The Park"



Shared on Poetry Pantry #150 at Poets United.





© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2013

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12 Comments:

Blogger Brian Miller said...

you def capture the mood in this....the skin of walls...what an interesting way to put it in your close...like us as houses...

20 May, 2013 01:03  
Blogger anthonynorth said...

Desolate words beautifully done.

20 May, 2013 03:09  
Blogger Mary said...

I like 'skins of walls frozen stiff.' I also like it explained about why the leaves of spring fall...I think there is an analogy to humans here. Sometimes we too are just too tired to cling on! I always enjoy your contributions/participation in Poetry Pantry.

20 May, 2013 07:23  
Anonymous Lisa Williams said...

Being tired certainly can make things seem dismal. A very profound and moving poem.

20 May, 2013 10:46  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Brian,

I think this is a moody piece too. And I am glad that you can see this as "like us as houses.." :)


Anthony,

Thank you! Desolation can be beautifully captured too, right? :)


Mary

You are right. This is an analogy to humans here. This is more than a description of a physical condition. It's about depression, and the effect on the person suffering from it, and the caregiver.

I think it is one of the more sensitive poems I have written.

20 May, 2013 13:30  
OpenID mindlovemisery said...

This is so beautiful, eerie, and so melancholy and it coincides perfectly with the weather outside

20 May, 2013 16:53  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Lisa,

thank you! :)


mindlovemisery,

moody weather, huh?
thanks for visiting. :)

20 May, 2013 21:00  
Blogger McGuffy Ann said...

A very moving poem.

21 May, 2013 00:12  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Love this one.A mood of quiet despair but things can with the wind. Lovely imagery.

Cressida de Nova

21 May, 2013 11:24  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

McGuffy Ann, Cressida,

Thank you for the kind comments. :)

21 May, 2013 22:09  
Blogger R.K. Garon said...

Yikes, I had to look out my window and was hoping to find the Spring sun. Yup, it was there.
A very nice capture of the mood.
ZQ

24 May, 2013 05:57  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Yes, it's still there (and a very hot day today too). :)

Thanks, ZQ!

24 May, 2013 22:48  

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