Monday, May 06, 2013

birds of prey

Science Fiction and Poetry do not usually cohabit amicably. I am trying to prove that wrong with this poem.

I wrote this for this year's edition of NaPoWriMo. Is it working?

photo by Schick
image from morguefile

birds of prey

we wait
for the dusk
to scatter
the last of the

on cliff edges
that was once
the bastions
of mighty

and as the
last shards
of light splinter
and fall like
broken glass

we stretch
our wings the leather
taut with muscles
leap off
the precipice

soar over
the smoke and ruins
of a world
torched by
atomic fire.


"This is the way the world ends
Not with a bang but a whimper.” 

― T.S. Eliot

Shared on Poetry Pantry #149 at Poets United.

© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2013

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Anonymous Lisa Williams said...

Wow! This is an amazing poem, absolutely love the third stanza.

06 May, 2013 00:46  
Blogger Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

I grey and shattered world through the eyes of a predator--yes--I think this works!

06 May, 2013 01:20  
Blogger anthonynorth said...

This is powerful and scary. Great write.

06 May, 2013 01:26  
Blogger Amber said...

This is absolutely fantastic! I love it!

I am

06 May, 2013 01:41  
Blogger Mary said...

I think science and fiction and poetry combined DOES work. I do LIKE your poem.

06 May, 2013 05:31  
Blogger Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

It sure is working! Quite an achievement, to do it so deftly yet subtly.

06 May, 2013 06:09  
Blogger Brian Miller said...

i would hope that we never get there...a world smoking in atomic fire...though there always seems to be some man man ready to give it a try...and at the rate we are going in disrespecting our planet and each might just happen

06 May, 2013 06:37  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


thank you! i really like the third stanza too. :)


thank you! :)




thank you! :)


in this case, it works like a charm? :)


thank you! and to think it's for NaPoWriMo. :D


i hope not too. :(

06 May, 2013 23:48  
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08 May, 2013 19:51  
Blogger hyperCRYPTICal said...

Excellent words.

I fear we will leap off the precipice...

Anna :o]

08 May, 2013 23:18  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, Anna. :)

with so much differences between nations, this can be a likely scenario. :(

09 May, 2013 00:18  
Blogger magiceye said...

Wow wow!!

This is absolutely brilliant!!

09 May, 2013 11:53  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

a double wow!

thank you, ny friend! :)

09 May, 2013 21:52  

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