Sunday, December 02, 2012


This poem was first published in this blog in October 2010 in response to a prompt. It is a poem about love, and also about loss.

It is also an exercise in writing a Tetractys poem.

photo by ericpruis
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it was
and still is
a monument
to the brave fallen of the two great wars.
we used to sit on its cold granite steps
just the night sky
the stars and

die, she too.
left me alone
to talk to the dead of the two great wars.


"How I wish, how I wish you were here."

-- Pink Floyd, Wish You Were Here

This is for Poetry Pantry Week #126.

© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ), 2012

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Anonymous Anonymous said...

love the concision and restraint in this poem - has a real stillness about it which really reflects the mood of the subject. Great write.

03 December, 2012 00:09  
Anonymous WabiSabi said...

Your choice of form greatly enhances the spare atmosphere and the loss conveyed in the poem's words. Well done!

03 December, 2012 01:34  
Blogger Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

This is beautiful!

03 December, 2012 02:05  
Blogger Mary said...

I enjoyed the form of this poem...and yes, the dead of two great wars would, I am sure, have much to talk about.

03 December, 2012 02:08  
Blogger Unknown said...

I have stood at Flander's Field. This piece evokes an equal emotional response. Death. Love. Loss. Brilliant.

03 December, 2012 03:27  
Blogger aelfbee said...

To talk to the dead of the two great wars -- and her too?

03 December, 2012 05:21  
Blogger Brian Miller said...

makes me think of visiting arlington...and sadly far too many heroes die...the turn with she very effective...

03 December, 2012 10:51  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


thank you! the stillness you mentioned about, i think it too reflects my mood when i wrote this piece. :)


yes, i think the choice of form helps in this case. sparse words and empty spaces do convey a sense of stillness and calm. thank you for your comment. :)


Thank you! :)


thank you! looks like the form works well in this case.


Flanders Field. wow, it must have been an awe-inspiring, and at the same time, overwhelming moment. thanks for stopping by. :)


oh yes, and her too. :)


too few people remember the ultimate sacrifice some gave so that we all can live safely. i was also writing about a personal loss.

thank you, my friend.

03 December, 2012 21:20  
Blogger Cressida de Nova said...

I love that Pink Floyd song.One of my favourites.Good choice to enhance the feeling of personal loss.

04 December, 2012 23:34  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, Cressida. the use of that quote was for this intention. :)

05 December, 2012 19:52  

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