before the day is done
photo by dsnake1
before the day is done
as the last rays
of the sun
strain through the rain trees
into the hoist bay
we sit at a makeshift table
in a pow wow
before the day
is done
rolling our cigarettes
it is not easy really
tobacco rolling is an art
the fingers greasy no doubt
it's either that
a big slab of leaves
smuggled in
from indonesia
or beedies
then the click
of lighters
the lazy flare
of a match
the cackle of laughter
crude jokes
crows caw
a puff of smoke
puffs of smoke
stub out ends
in
a dented coke can
choked with butts
or let it burn
to the fingers
dropping ashes
to the concrete
floor
ashes like squashed moths
more crows caw
truly rude jokes
caw caw caw
cough cough
then
they leave
we leave
leaving
unwashed mugs on the tabletop
waiting for moonlight to wash
over them
tonight
05/01/10
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I am posting this poem for Poetry Pantry -#106. (what, one week already?) It's been lurking in the hard drive for a couple of years, and I guessed it's time to drag it out. :)
Song for the day : Another Day in Paradise
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2012
Labels: camaraderie, landscape, life, Poetry, Work
6 Comments:
Wonderful poem, dsnake -- lots of atmosphere and vivid imagery, and the laughter and banter of these guys can be heard. Love the way you ended it. An incomplete gesture, leaving the mugs out under the moonlight, an emphasis of simply living the moment, instead of washing and clearing for a tomorrow. If you want to use the cup tomorrow, wash it when tomorrow comes. :)
yes, i think you have nailed it nicely by saying they are "simply living the moment". they would have used disposable cups, but no one gonna come out the money to buy them. :D
i have thought of editing and sending this poem to some ezine like QLRS, but i am really very busy with work this year so i don't think i have the time and stamina to do it.
thanks for your comments! :)
nice poem!
thank you, Ashok!
really nice...you really capture the moment there...i like the details you pull out of it...like squashed moths...and the coke can...the repeated puffs...nice....
Brian, thanks for the visit and comments. much appreciated. :)
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