Sunday, May 04, 2008

Rust

The theme or phrase in Haikuworld's April 2008 kukai in the Free Format Section was "Rust". Again, I thought it was easy stuff...

Well, 4 points for the effort, and also a comment from a reader : "I really liked the combination of looking back _and_ moving on." Thank you for the comment. :)

Personally, I quite like the haiku too.


rusty lock and handle
image from imageafter.com


Rust



missing dad.
sandpapering rust
off his old tool box.



Red Star button

and here is one that was not submitted :


rusted hulk of bike
abandoned at side of road.
journey's end.




© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 )

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11 Comments:

Blogger polona said...

i like both... but i think you submitted the right one.
(i failed to participate again)

05 May, 2008 01:58  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I like them both! :)

05 May, 2008 12:33  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

polona,
i thought i submitted the right one too, and the other one was not too bad either. :)

submissions for next kukai are out. i may try again.

andrew,
thank you. :)

05 May, 2008 19:08  
Blogger magiceye said...

love them both!

06 May, 2008 14:51  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

magiceye,
thank you, thank you.:)

06 May, 2008 18:30  
Anonymous gautami tripathy said...

You can't know how the first one has affected me. I still use my dad's rusted tool box.

07 May, 2008 21:00  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

gautami,

that's good, if the tool box is still usable, why not? i am sure it can bring back fond memories of your dad.

07 May, 2008 23:39  
Anonymous Ario said...

Long time no see and all that! Just wanted to say I loved the starkness of the emotional imagery here. They both work very well methinks!

10 May, 2008 20:24  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Ario,
long time no see too. :)

i am glad you enjoyed both haikus.

10 May, 2008 22:44  
Blogger Deborah Vatcher said...

I enjoyed both of these, the way they hold time and memory.

11 May, 2008 04:51  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

deborah,
thank you!

11 May, 2008 11:32  

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