that you left me
Sometimes, in moments of quiet solitude,the past catches up with you and holds your hand...
painting by Albrecht Duerer (1471 - 1528)
image from visipix.com
that you left me
i was afraid
time will erase
your memories
your smiles
and i am
getting old
so today
i will just
write
some words
i cannot
send you
a card
like before
or take your
hands in mine
and point to
the stars
in the sky
take this as
a poem
for you
and if you
have read it
you will smile
and would
have cried.
28.01.08
********
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1)
painting by Albrecht Duerer (1471 - 1528)
image from visipix.com
that you left me
i was afraid
time will erase
your memories
your smiles
and i am
getting old
so today
i will just
write
some words
i cannot
send you
a card
like before
or take your
hands in mine
and point to
the stars
in the sky
take this as
a poem
for you
and if you
have read it
you will smile
and would
have cried.
28.01.08
********
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1)
posted by dsnake1 at 2:11 AM
15 Comments:
Yes it does. A beautiful way to reach back and touch.
Pat,
thanks!
it took me only a short while to write this, with little editing to the original draft. i thought it might be too personal but i post it anyway.:)
I'm glad you shared this one with your readers. Resonated with me as it reminded me of Yeat's poem When You Are Old.
this is beautiful and touching.
thank you for sharing
Thanks for sharing this with us. So very touching. I like the reaching out.
deborah,
thanks for your kind comments.
Yeat's poem is a timeless classic. :)
polona,
thank you!
gautami,
glad you like the poem. :)
absolutely wonderful dsnake
there is so much emotion in this
your personal emotion gives the piece its power and veracity
and in turn
this gives piece something with which we can all identify and share
thank you
floots,
really appreciate your comments.
i think there's a lot of emotions when i wrote this (and i write best when i am not trying too hard) but i was not looking for pity or sympathy, more of a "what if" scenario.
this is beautiful. I seem to always look into the past.
poignant...
delicate and beautiful
andrew,
yes, this is an attempted journey back to the past..:)
magiceye,
thank you!
The opening caught me, your poem kept me, and I hope that writing this helped you. Strong, steadfast, eternal love soars in your raw emotions penned here.
This pierces my heart and tears trinkle down my face. Thank you for sharing this innermost part of yourself, DSnake.
{ * * } Gel
Thank you, GEL.
Writing helps. :)
so beautiful. the he to my she are feeling those same words of a love that left, too. i wonder if the smile sometime hangs around?
hi iimagyne,
if this is the first time you are visiting my blog, welcome!
thank you for leaving your comments. :)
this was written for an anniversary, and yes, i can still see those smiles. :)
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