Friday, May 12, 2006

Photo-Poetry Challenge : Photo 4

At first I had no idea what to write for this photo. After some drafts about the sea and surf, I settled for this tanka. A lot of words were thrown away.

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image from internet, source unknown

Beach

sea waves erasing
our retreating footprints
on a slate of sand


to roll back, surprised, as we
held hands and laughed like children.


11.05.06
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8 Comments:

Blogger floots said...

beautiful combo
loved "slate of sand"

12 May, 2006 19:34  
Blogger Medusa aka expiringpoet said...

I love how u described the motion of the waves and personified its movements in this way. Your words made it really come alive for me in my mind. Lovely!

13 May, 2006 22:16  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

floots,
thank you, finally a tanka i'm comfortable with. :)

expiringpoet,
these were some memories from my reckless youth :)

13 May, 2006 22:40  
Blogger Bluesky_Liz said...

I think this befits the photo.

15 May, 2006 15:12  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

liz,
thanks.

15 May, 2006 20:39  
Blogger Ryan said...

This is such a comforting bit of writing. Good mind-picture (and real picture) of water washing retreating footsteps, on a slate, and the bit about being surprised as if those walking expected thier footprints to hold up against the water or didn't expect the water to crawl so far into the sand.

18 May, 2006 23:44  
Blogger Gilbert Koh said...

Very nice .... This is Dsnake made minimalist.

22 May, 2006 09:12  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hi ryan,
thanks for visiting and for your illuminating comments. :)

gilbert,
i'm stingy with words once a while, heh. :)

24 May, 2006 23:10  

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