Wednesday, September 28, 2005

Rain&Night

I wanted to post this a couple of days back, but have been working late. It's something about rain.
I wrote this piece some time back, and with some slight revisions, here it is :

Rain&Night

lightning rolled lazily across the night sky
       like bad fluoresence
the sky , blushing palely then,
meets this sudden outburst of light
like startled lovers
       & blushes again

the rain, beating its sleep song on apartment blocks,
       lashes on plastic awnings
grime caked walls, as
a bamboo of clothes fluttered on one high floor
forlorn , defeated,

down below on the playground
       devoid of children,
no sounds of taunts, laughter
but the drum roll of thunder
the metal slides, the ladders, the rusted monkey rails,
like exposed fossilised bones of beasts long gone,
       thrusting out of rock.

a wet mongrel , growling
       lurches across this wastescape
its howl, a puny protest
against the thunder
       that rocked across the sullen night sky...


9.10 pm, 15-Nov-1977
revised 28-Sep-2005

17 Comments:

Blogger kittyn said...

now then I realise you got a blog too... kekeke Mind if i put your link in mine??

28 September, 2005 12:34  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hi kittyn,
so glad you dropped by, what a pleasant surprise. Put my link in your blog? No problem.

I'm going to put your link in this blog too, if you don't mind. :)

28 September, 2005 22:31  
Blogger Alson Teo said...

Hello dsnake1,

Nice poem. If it is okay with you I would like to comment on it. :)

29 September, 2005 01:14  
Blogger Orso Dorato said...

Dude I love this poem. Thats about all i can say i'm speechless.

29 September, 2005 05:58  
Blogger kittyn said...

dsnake1... not a problem... by all means include a link to my blog :)

29 September, 2005 09:58  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

DP,
please do. I value your comments, they are always so constructive.
Thanks, friend. :)

29 September, 2005 19:55  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hi orso dorato,
glad you like this poem, your encouragement will spur me to write more.

thanks, dude!

29 September, 2005 20:01  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

kittyn, thanks!

29 September, 2005 20:02  
Blogger Orso Dorato said...

Thanks for asking about the forestry thing. Yeah it was organized by my highschool. Its a shame you dont have many forests around.

30 September, 2005 02:18  
Blogger Alson Teo said...

No problem.

This is a very interesting poem. I love interesting poem. Give a chance for my brain to work on something else rather than stupid reports.

Will pm you my comments later.

30 September, 2005 13:52  
Blogger Bluesky_Liz said...

That last image of the mongrel wet in the rain really stays in the mind. It's a bit scary if one were to meet something like that when coming home on a stormy night.

30 September, 2005 19:27  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hey DP,
I don't like stupid reports too!

Glad you like this piece. Will be waiting for your comments.

Maybe i shall drag out some more old poems and revise them, hehe.

30 September, 2005 20:00  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

liz, glad that the image of the dog is so strong, and it will be scary to bump into it on a stormy night! But i guess its main thought is to find a dry place to lie down.

These were the actual scenes i saw from the window of a rental flat i once stayed in.

30 September, 2005 20:12  
Blogger Alson Teo said...

Hi dsnake1,

I’ve just pm you my comments. Hope I didn’t sound too harsh. :)

01 October, 2005 00:40  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hello DP,
I saw the comments, thanks!
Maybe I will reproduce our exchange of mails on this matter in the blog :)

02 October, 2005 23:40  
Blogger floots said...

being a git of a wet mongrel myself
this one got to me
cheers

02 October, 2005 23:45  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hahaha!
thanks, floots

02 October, 2005 23:58  

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