Rain&Night
I wrote this piece some time back, and with some slight revisions, here it is :
Rain&Night
lightning rolled lazily across the night sky
like bad fluoresence
the sky , blushing palely then,
meets this sudden outburst of light
like startled lovers
& blushes again
the rain, beating its sleep song on apartment blocks,
lashes on plastic awnings
grime caked walls, as
a bamboo of clothes fluttered on one high floor
forlorn , defeated,
down below on the playground
devoid of children,
no sounds of taunts, laughter
but the drum roll of thunder
the metal slides, the ladders, the rusted monkey rails,
like exposed fossilised bones of beasts long gone,
thrusting out of rock.
a wet mongrel , growling
lurches across this wastescape
its howl, a puny protest
against the thunder
that rocked across the sullen night sky...
9.10 pm, 15-Nov-1977
revised 28-Sep-2005
14 Comments:
now then I realise you got a blog too... kekeke Mind if i put your link in mine??
Hi kittyn,
so glad you dropped by, what a pleasant surprise. Put my link in your blog? No problem.
I'm going to put your link in this blog too, if you don't mind. :)
Dude I love this poem. Thats about all i can say i'm speechless.
dsnake1... not a problem... by all means include a link to my blog :)
DP,
please do. I value your comments, they are always so constructive.
Thanks, friend. :)
Hi orso dorato,
glad you like this poem, your encouragement will spur me to write more.
thanks, dude!
kittyn, thanks!
Thanks for asking about the forestry thing. Yeah it was organized by my highschool. Its a shame you dont have many forests around.
That last image of the mongrel wet in the rain really stays in the mind. It's a bit scary if one were to meet something like that when coming home on a stormy night.
Hey DP,
I don't like stupid reports too!
Glad you like this piece. Will be waiting for your comments.
Maybe i shall drag out some more old poems and revise them, hehe.
liz, glad that the image of the dog is so strong, and it will be scary to bump into it on a stormy night! But i guess its main thought is to find a dry place to lie down.
These were the actual scenes i saw from the window of a rental flat i once stayed in.
Hello DP,
I saw the comments, thanks!
Maybe I will reproduce our exchange of mails on this matter in the blog :)
being a git of a wet mongrel myself
this one got to me
cheers
Hahaha!
thanks, floots
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