quarrel
now I just want to hear her voice...
ink and water colour sketch by dsnake1
quarrel
like a rush
of arctic wind
that scutters over
a winter pond
dusting hoarfrost on reeds,
we sat, stiff, cold
as strangers
no words, no words pass between us today.
no words, no words she said.
revised 07/12/2008
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Shared at Friday Writings #9.
BAND-MAID - start over
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2022
quarrel
like a rush
of arctic wind
that scutters over
a winter pond
dusting hoarfrost on reeds,
we sat, stiff, cold
as strangers
no words, no words pass between us today.
no words, no words she said.
revised 07/12/2008
****************
Shared at Friday Writings #9.
BAND-MAID - start over
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2022
posted by dsnake1 at 12:11 AM
19 Comments:
Oh how I enjoy your sketches ... such talent! The sparseness of this poem resonates deeply.
Thank you, Helen!
and i started the coloring with a wrong brush. :)
What an absolutely perfect description of a quarrel!
I enjoy your sketches too.
And yes, this poem goes straight to the heart. The metaphor is vivid; then the last two, literal, lines so bleak.
It's a sinking feeling. Sometimes I go under.
Beverly,
Thank you! :)
Rosemary,
Thank you! I like the sketch too.
This is an old poem, couldn't remember when it was written. I think the last two lines added a lot of weight to the poem.
Colleen,
Thank you!
A sinking feeling it is.
I remember the bleakness of the quiet after some quarrels, and how much I yearned for the possibility of noise again.
This is so precious, a captured moment. It feels like a haiku. A glimpse into a moment that holds so many untold stories.
Rommy,
Thank you!
The important thing is, to to be able to speak to each other again. :)
Magaly,
Thank you!
It is quite a short poem. :)
Love the sketch! The poem brought many things up for me. So well done.
Thank you, Sara!
glad you like the sketch. :)
I liked how the coldness of the weather matches the coldness of the relationship. Also, the sketch is lovely.
What a gorgeous poem and sketch. Thanks.
Greetings from London.
JYP,
Thank you!
yes, glad you like the sketch too. :)
Mario,
Thank you!
glad you like the poem and sketch. :)
I imagine two people who were once friends and now they are cold to each other.
Sadly, I've lived this
J M,
thank you!
sadly, i guess, most of us have lived through this...
Super post. Happy new year ��
Thank you, Rajani!
Love the poem and the art too!
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