dove and snake
Life's not fair but we move on...
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dove and snake
look
people pissed you off
i know
a truck
backfiring
startles we learned that from
the jungles
and wadis
you can
shoot snow
into your veins do we care?
but why
let them win?
no reason
to
make the evening's headlines
or
whatever
it's not
like russian roulette you hold
the ace
06/10/2015
**********
Do you relate more to the dove or to the snake?
*
from “Form” by Louise Mathias
I was inspired by the lines from the above poem (and a rather moody day). This is a prompt from the Bibliomancy Oracle. It can work in sullen ways.
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2015
image from morguefile.com
dove and snake
look
people pissed you off
i know
a truck
backfiring
startles we learned that from
the jungles
and wadis
you can
shoot snow
into your veins do we care?
but why
let them win?
no reason
to
make the evening's headlines
or
whatever
it's not
like russian roulette you hold
the ace
06/10/2015
**********
Do you relate more to the dove or to the snake?
*
from “Form” by Louise Mathias
I was inspired by the lines from the above poem (and a rather moody day). This is a prompt from the Bibliomancy Oracle. It can work in sullen ways.
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2015
Labels: crime, life, mindscape, Poetry, social issues, urban
posted by dsnake1 at 9:19 PM
18 Comments:
No one cares.. But then why let them win... Like that!
thank you, thotpurge!
was in a bad mood. :)
Both - perhaps it is about balance - which voice should we listen to? Whenever i do what i do i am reminded of an edited quote given to me by a loved one and stuck on the fridge 'You might as well live (well)' sadly it doesn't always stop us/me from letting the crap flow through my veins...a clever and resonant poem..
I can feel the anger in the lines... for certain life is unfair and people disappoint us... crush our spirit.. but like you said... we just can't let them win. Excellent write :)
Jae,
we do need all the help we can, from friends or family. and i agree there is a need to strike a balance. extremism usually do not work.
i really liked how you interpret the poem. i seldom write such abstract stuff. :)
Sanaa,
no, we just can't let them win! :)
Both and neither, we just have to follow our instinct and breathe a few times before we fall into anger.
Somedays it feels as if we are reasoning with futility and the world has lost all reason...
Yes, this poem made me think of the misguided anger of extremists.....well said, we cant let them win.
Hard one for me to understand today, but it seems Jae Rose has got it. I guess what comes to mind is even if a person is 'pissed off' by someone it is not a good reason to 'shoot snow into your veins.' Everyone holds the 'ace' in their own life. Anyway that is what I get from it, which I am not sure is 100% what you had intended.
An awesome write ... and wise.
the dark mood is prominent...a clever write...
Bjorn,
i guess following our instinct is a good choice, and though sometimes it may be wrong, but still it is a decision that shouldn't be regretted.
Donna,
it is, it is. we see a world pulling apart. we see more homeless, more poverty, the widening chasm between the haves and haves-not. the random violence in the cities. i was hoping the ship can right itself.
Sherry.
it does? that's another angle too. extremists are misguided by misinformation, disinformation and propaganda. basically they were once just like ordinary folks.
Mary,
i know, this poem may be a hard nut to crack. it is a bit abstract, in a way.
basically, this poem is about how one is going to live his life. are we going to be weak and timid and be bullied, give in to drugs, or turn into a violent madman? the dove and the snake are at different ends of each other, but they are not extremes. one is calm and may find peaceful means to clear a situation, the other will strike back when provoked. the 'ace' shows that everyone's choice is in their own hands.
it is a very recent write, and i wasn't sure of posting it. glad i did.
whew! a pretty long reply. :)
Wendy,
thank you! just putting down some of my thoughts. :)
Sumana,
dark, huh? in a way, yes, it's quite moody. :)
Dove and Snake together is exactly right. When will we learn not to be semi-suicidal--send our rage out instead of in? And send it out in ways that honor life? I smoked cigarettes for 37 years--a small addiction comparatively--but I couldn't quit until I wanted something more--something that would give me to myself. That's the dove, how I finally learned to love god in me and then see that in others.
Love your style - and also your (very different) source poem by Mathias.
PS I particularly love your conclusion.
Susan,
first, thank you for your comment. this type of comment can prompt me to write another poem, really. :)
no one mentioned it yet, but there is a certain structure/form in the poem. it is as if to say, there is a method in the chaos.
i smoked for over 30 plus years too, and one day the heart muscles just gave a nasty twitch, and i just quit like that. i guess that was also the dove taking over. i think that i have finally learn to love myself.
Rosemary,
ah, so you have noticed the structure of the poem?
yes, it is different from the source poem, but is partially inspired by it, especially about the 'pointless hills' and horse.
i like the conclusion too. :)
oh I like,"it's not
like russian roulette you hold
the ace"
and the gritty undertone to the rest of the piece (and indeed to other poems on your page), urban poetry indeed.
Those last lines though remind me of a piece I read a while ago, of a person playing russian roulette with themselves - an interesting expression of self-destruction, with the decision removed outwards yet still within the person's clasp. Anyways, I digress, great write!
i don't know, when i am in the mood, i like to write gritty stuff. :)
glad how you interpret the last strophe, like what i intended. that the decision is still in one's grasp.
about the piece you read, is it "the deer hunter"?
thanks for your comment!
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