Thursday, April 21, 2011

why i waited in the rain


This is the first time I am participating in the Thursday Poets' Rally (Week 42) and I am posting this for the event.

Although this poem has appeared in this blog before, in June 2007, it is one of my favourites, and I thought I would like to share it again. :)





photo by chelle
image from morguefile.com



why i waited in the rain


because you came to me
with your umbrella
offering shelter
like a heroine
out of a wuxia novel
and your smile
was dazzling
even on a wet
March morning.

you leaned close to me
warm breath in my face
a scent of soft talc
fresh lilac flowers,
the patter of rain
on stretched fabric
keeping time
racing alongside
our heartbeats.


we laughed
and stamped on puddles
like children
the song of our joy
scattering like beads
of crystal
clearer than the rays
that were
trying to break
through moody clouds.



07.06.07
********



© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 )

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27 Comments:

Blogger thingy said...

Welcome!

What a lovely poem. A very nice choice for the Rally. : )

21 April, 2011 20:28  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, thingy! :)

21 April, 2011 21:34  
Blogger Vinay said...

very beautiful words, Dsnake! :) Thank you for your comment on mine!

21 April, 2011 23:12  
Anonymous bendedspoon said...

That's a wonderful poem and moments! :)

21 April, 2011 23:37  
Blogger Kim Nelson said...

I've read dozens of poems in the last couple of days. This is one of the most captivating and compelling. Diction and form are flawless. Really well-written.

Kim

http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/04/21/unrelated/

22 April, 2011 00:56  
OpenID bodhirose said...

I can see why it would be a favorite. I love the joyful image you portrayed here--just beautifully sweet. Thank you for sharing this.

22 April, 2011 01:03  
OpenID teric said...

Oh this is so beautiful and visual.
Welcome to the rally. This is my second time and it is so fun and there is so many beautiful poems to enjoy.

22 April, 2011 01:54  
Blogger Jingle Poetry said...

welcome,


very cute imagery...
beautiful word flow.

22 April, 2011 02:43  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Vinay,

thank you! that was a very lovely poem you posted. :)


bendedspoon,

thank you! :)


Kim,

thanks for your kind comments! :)


bodhirose,

yes, it was a joyful moment from my youth. the title was actually from an ad in a cab, "Why wait in the rain?" and i have no idea what it was about, but it inspired this piece. :)


teric,

thanks! i am looking forward to the next rally already, and yes, there are so many wonderful poems to enjoy. :)


Jingle,

thanks for your comments! :)

22 April, 2011 09:36  
OpenID fiveloaf said...

lovely.. my thursday post : http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/20/me-before-us/

22 April, 2011 15:08  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you,fiveloaf! :)

22 April, 2011 16:03  
Blogger Andy said...

Lovely.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to the Rally. Hope you'll join us next time...it's a great place to relax, share and enjoy some great writing.

23 April, 2011 22:59  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hi Andy,

thanks for visiting!

i hope to post again in the next rally. and yes, i agree with you that it's a good place to relax and enjoy some great writing. :)

23 April, 2011 23:33  
Anonymous Jay said...

Awwwwwwwwwww........ This is very sweet :)) Lovely <3

24 April, 2011 02:20  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, Jay! :)

24 April, 2011 07:18  
Anonymous Butterflies of time said...

I completely understand why you waited in the rain--such sweetness pours through in this poem!

24 April, 2011 12:25  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hi Butterflies of Time,

thanks for visiting!
it's the only time when rain is not a nuisance. :)

24 April, 2011 21:09  
OpenID sugaryichigo said...

There is something about the rain that inspires poignancy and a little bit of romance. :). Beautiful poem.

24 April, 2011 21:25  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hi sugaryichigo,

it certainly does. the rain inspires me to write a lot of stuff, though not all are romantic.

and thanks for visiting ! :)

24 April, 2011 21:48  
OpenID lunawitch15 said...

it is a perfect poem! thank you for sharing!

Luna


http://lunawitch15.wordpress.com

24 April, 2011 22:02  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thanks, Luna, for your comments! :)

24 April, 2011 22:25  
Blogger Jingle Poetry said...

Hello:

You have won The Perfect Poet Award Week 42, Due to your performance in the present!

Please leave a link under the award post after you take it,

This award will Not be given to poets who reject it or previously rejected it.

Happy Writing, Thanks for the support!

25 April, 2011 23:55  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Hi!

Thanks! :)

26 April, 2011 23:35  
Blogger Lu Ann said...

Welcome! Aww indeed it is a great, great poem! Nice choice, I really enjoyed reading it :)

27 April, 2011 10:49  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Thank you, Lu Ann! :)

27 April, 2011 20:49  
Anonymous jeanne/geezergirl said...

beautiful.. very sensual and compelling. thanks

01 May, 2011 22:01  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thanks, jeanne!

i am flattered! :)

02 May, 2011 15:08  

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