why i waited in the rain
This is the first time I am participating in the Thursday Poets' Rally (Week 42) and I am posting this for the event.
Although this poem has appeared in this blog before, in June 2007, it is one of my favourites, and I thought I would like to share it again. :)
why i waited in the rain
because you came to me
with your umbrella
offering shelter
like a heroine
out of a wuxia novel
and your smile
was dazzling
even on a wet
March morning.
you leaned close to me
warm breath in my face
a scent of soft talc
fresh lilac flowers,
the patter of rain
on stretched fabric
keeping time
racing alongside
our heartbeats.
we laughed
and stamped on puddles
like children
the song of our joy
scattering like beads
of crystal
clearer than the rays
that were
trying to break
through moody clouds.
07.06.07
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© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 )
Labels: community, lovesongs, Poetry, Thursday Poets' Rally
posted by dsnake1 at 5:01 PM
27 Comments:
Welcome!
What a lovely poem. A very nice choice for the Rally. : )
thank you, thingy! :)
very beautiful words, Dsnake! :) Thank you for your comment on mine!
That's a wonderful poem and moments! :)
I've read dozens of poems in the last couple of days. This is one of the most captivating and compelling. Diction and form are flawless. Really well-written.
Kim
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/04/21/unrelated/
I can see why it would be a favorite. I love the joyful image you portrayed here--just beautifully sweet. Thank you for sharing this.
Oh this is so beautiful and visual.
Welcome to the rally. This is my second time and it is so fun and there is so many beautiful poems to enjoy.
welcome,
very cute imagery...
beautiful word flow.
Vinay,
thank you! that was a very lovely poem you posted. :)
bendedspoon,
thank you! :)
Kim,
thanks for your kind comments! :)
bodhirose,
yes, it was a joyful moment from my youth. the title was actually from an ad in a cab, "Why wait in the rain?" and i have no idea what it was about, but it inspired this piece. :)
teric,
thanks! i am looking forward to the next rally already, and yes, there are so many wonderful poems to enjoy. :)
Jingle,
thanks for your comments! :)
lovely.. my thursday post : http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/20/me-before-us/
thank you,fiveloaf! :)
Lovely.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to the Rally. Hope you'll join us next time...it's a great place to relax, share and enjoy some great writing.
Hi Andy,
thanks for visiting!
i hope to post again in the next rally. and yes, i agree with you that it's a good place to relax and enjoy some great writing. :)
Awwwwwwwwwww........ This is very sweet :)) Lovely <3
thank you, Jay! :)
I completely understand why you waited in the rain--such sweetness pours through in this poem!
Hi Butterflies of Time,
thanks for visiting!
it's the only time when rain is not a nuisance. :)
There is something about the rain that inspires poignancy and a little bit of romance. :). Beautiful poem.
Hi sugaryichigo,
it certainly does. the rain inspires me to write a lot of stuff, though not all are romantic.
and thanks for visiting ! :)
it is a perfect poem! thank you for sharing!
Luna
http://lunawitch15.wordpress.com
thanks, Luna, for your comments! :)
Hello:
You have won The Perfect Poet Award Week 42, Due to your performance in the present!
Please leave a link under the award post after you take it,
This award will Not be given to poets who reject it or previously rejected it.
Happy Writing, Thanks for the support!
Hi!
Thanks! :)
Welcome! Aww indeed it is a great, great poem! Nice choice, I really enjoyed reading it :)
Thank you, Lu Ann! :)
beautiful.. very sensual and compelling. thanks
thanks, jeanne!
i am flattered! :)
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