Sunday, March 23, 2008

February kukai : Night Life

The theme or phrase in Haikuworld's February 2008 kukai in the Free Format Section was "Night Life". I sent in an entry and I managed a total of... 1 point.

I thought writing about night life was a piece of cake... :)

high heel
image by dsnake1

Night Life

neon lit pavement
click of stiletto heels
on hard concrete

And here's another three that I wrote but didn't submit.


early morning rain.
traffic lights flickered
at empty road junction.


moon veiled by clouds
bats fluttered down from viaducts
looking for fruits.


last night bus
pulls out of terminus.
i try to catch some sleep.

© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 )

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Blogger gautami tripathy said...

I like your kukai. Those who don't are well..what do they know, anyway?!

Congrats for the award. You deserve it!

23 March, 2008 18:56  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, gautami. :)

i take the kukai as some fun writing, no problem with the points. (or no points). anyway, i think my haikus are only so-so. :)

23 March, 2008 21:05  
Blogger polona said...

i didn't submit to the kukai this time (in fact, for quite a long time) but i like the haiku you submitted. it conveys the image for me and makes me wonder about the woman and her whereabouts...

24 March, 2008 02:34  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

last night bus
pulls out of terminus.
i try to catch some sleep.

I like this one the best.

24 March, 2008 12:38  
Blogger magiceye said...

loved all of them!

24 March, 2008 16:46  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you. :)

i am also submitting irregularly.
anyway, there was a typo of the haiku on the website.
the "of" in "click of stiletto heels" was published as "on", and maybe this changes the meaning of the haiku.
but no, i am not going to protest about this. :)

i think i did well with this haiku. that's what i wanted to convey, to let the reader guess about the lady. :)

thank you.

maybe i should have submitted this one instead. :)

hey magiceye,

24 March, 2008 19:28  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

I think this stirkes an immediate thought, or feeling. Makes my eyeballs itchy.

25 March, 2008 07:57  
Blogger iimagyne said...

the night life haiku's were goood! i could see myself walking in a pair of stiletto heels breaking an ankle trying to keep my balance on the hard concrete.

25 March, 2008 20:27  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

oh Pat!

(the words or the picture?)

hi iiamgyne,

thank you. :)

25 March, 2008 22:31  
Blogger floots said...

it works for me
i can hear those heels
feel those nights :)

27 March, 2008 17:49  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


Cheers, floots!

27 March, 2008 22:32  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

I loved the one you submitted ..Keep them coming


29 March, 2008 03:03  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


Nasra, thank you!

29 March, 2008 23:35  

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