Monday, February 25, 2008

that you left me

Sometimes, in moments of quiet solitude,the past catches up with you and holds your hand...

Wild Roses by Albrecht Duerer
painting by Albrecht Duerer (1471 - 1528)
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that you left me

i was afraid
time will erase
your memories

your smiles

and i am
getting old

so today
i will just

some words

i cannot
send you
a card
like before

or take your
hands in mine

and point to
the stars
in the sky

take this as
a poem

for you

and if you
have read it
you will smile

and would
have cried.


© cheong lee san ( dsnake1)

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Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Yes it does. A beautiful way to reach back and touch.

26 February, 2008 21:45  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


it took me only a short while to write this, with little editing to the original draft. i thought it might be too personal but i post it anyway.:)

26 February, 2008 23:50  
Blogger Deborah Vatcher said...

I'm glad you shared this one with your readers. Resonated with me as it reminded me of Yeat's poem When You Are Old.

27 February, 2008 03:43  
Blogger polona said...

this is beautiful and touching.
thank you for sharing

27 February, 2008 04:12  
Blogger gautami tripathy said...

Thanks for sharing this with us. So very touching. I like the reaching out.

27 February, 2008 16:17  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


thanks for your kind comments.
Yeat's poem is a timeless classic. :)

thank you!

glad you like the poem. :)

27 February, 2008 19:33  
Blogger floots said...

absolutely wonderful dsnake
there is so much emotion in this
your personal emotion gives the piece its power and veracity
and in turn
this gives piece something with which we can all identify and share
thank you

28 February, 2008 20:06  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

really appreciate your comments.

i think there's a lot of emotions when i wrote this (and i write best when i am not trying too hard) but i was not looking for pity or sympathy, more of a "what if" scenario.

28 February, 2008 23:49  
Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

this is beautiful. I seem to always look into the past.

29 February, 2008 12:46  
Blogger magiceye said...

delicate and beautiful

29 February, 2008 15:24  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

yes, this is an attempted journey back to the past..:)

thank you!

29 February, 2008 22:48  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

The opening caught me, your poem kept me, and I hope that writing this helped you. Strong, steadfast, eternal love soars in your raw emotions penned here.

This pierces my heart and tears trinkle down my face. Thank you for sharing this innermost part of yourself, DSnake.
{ * * } Gel

15 March, 2008 14:32  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Thank you, GEL.

Writing helps. :)

15 March, 2008 16:26  
Blogger iimagyne said...

so beautiful. the he to my she are feeling those same words of a love that left, too. i wonder if the smile sometime hangs around?

25 March, 2008 20:29  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi iimagyne,
if this is the first time you are visiting my blog, welcome!

thank you for leaving your comments. :)

this was written for an anniversary, and yes, i can still see those smiles. :)

25 March, 2008 22:23  

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