hell notes
This is the 5th poem from my collection for the GPA 2007 competition.
This poem was written in a short span of time, almost no editing on it. And I think I quite like it, despite the morbid subject. I chopped it up in certain parts, like the snatches of conversations, or the outpourings of grief we witness at a Taoist funeral wake, which this poem is all about.
I am skipping the sequence and posting this piece first, because a good friend had recently passed away.
painting by Kawanabe Kyosai (1831 - 1889)
image from visipix.com
hell notes
they said
one moment
he was living
then a slight twitch
of muscles
fingers grasping
air
a page, a name
then when the ink dried
the book gently closed
the death god
dragged its chains
and sighed
and what is left
a face a name
a string
of memories
a portrait
in front
of a coffin
paper gold
to bribe
and a light
from an
oil lamp
to guide
the way
08.02.07
********
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 )
This poem was written in a short span of time, almost no editing on it. And I think I quite like it, despite the morbid subject. I chopped it up in certain parts, like the snatches of conversations, or the outpourings of grief we witness at a Taoist funeral wake, which this poem is all about.
I am skipping the sequence and posting this piece first, because a good friend had recently passed away.
painting by Kawanabe Kyosai (1831 - 1889)
image from visipix.com
hell notes
they said
one moment
he was living
then a slight twitch
of muscles
fingers grasping
air
a page, a name
then when the ink dried
the book gently closed
the death god
dragged its chains
and sighed
and what is left
a face a name
a string
of memories
a portrait
in front
of a coffin
paper gold
to bribe
and a light
from an
oil lamp
to guide
the way
08.02.07
********
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 )
Labels: death, Poetry, poetry competition
posted by dsnake1 at 11:06 PM
13 Comments:
This is Powerful and amazing write up ...Yes ...so powerful writing
thank you, Nasra.
i was afraid it might be too "local", but i guess it works. :)
dark and powerful but i like it.
polona,
thank you!
maybe i write better on dark themes. :)
very powerful!
thanks, andrew! :)
powerful and poignant
:)
thanks!
Fine work. Enjoyed this poem.
Very powerful. And I love crows..
hi deborah,
thanks for visiting. glad you like the poem. :)
gautami,
thank you!
that's a very lovely painting by a Japanese painter. :)
a most touching piece dsnake
and you have chose the perfect illustration to complememnt it
thank you
that's a great compliment , floots!
thank you. :)
i thought this post would be appropriate for my late friend. when i came across this picture , i felt that this would be a good illustration for this poem.
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