Thursday, September 21, 2006

some things are eternal

Today will be my late wife's birthday, if she's still alive.

Here is something I wrote for her. Strange, how most of my favourite writings were written in a short space of time. This one was done in less than half an hour, and with little revision.

Death Angel
image by dsnake1

2.25 a.m. 28th January 1994

why didn't death take a break
that night in the hospital?
get a coffee, take a smoke
       or lose its way
but dragged those chains
those dim corridors
clanging, grating
a stench of rotted wood
a blur of a shadow
       a cold whiff of frangipanni
it took her away, gently
leaving me
at 3am
all alone
looking out at a sodden sky
about to weep.


sometimes, some things are eternal. -- dsnake1


Anonymous Anonymous said...

Strong emotions in this one. One can quite feel the sorrow coming off the screen.

Often when something affects me deeply, like lost, it doesn't take a lot of time to come up with something strong.

- Liz

22 September, 2006 19:40  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Your poem reflects the deep wound a close loss produces. It never heals, we just cover it up. These anniversaries can sure take the wind out of you, my heart goes out to you.

22 September, 2006 20:13  
Blogger floots said...

pat has said it for me

22 September, 2006 23:15  
Blogger Medusa aka expiringpoet said...

Good one. Love endures through separation and loss. That's the beauty of this unique gift.
Hugs to you my friend.

22 September, 2006 23:38  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi Liz,
i guess it's true that hunger, anger, joy or loss can push a person to write or paint stronger.

hi pat,
thanks for your kind words. i just feel i need to write something.

floots, you're a pal, thank you.

hey medusa, thank you!
i can never forget that day.

23 September, 2006 00:01  
Blogger polona said...

grief can produce wonderful things, and this is one of them.
as pat said, my heart goes out to you.

23 September, 2006 02:57  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi polona,
thanks for stopping by, and i really appreciate your kind comments.

23 September, 2006 21:41  
Blogger steve said...

wow. you wrote it very well. thank you for putting here.

23 September, 2006 22:20  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi steve,
thank you!

24 September, 2006 22:48  
Blogger Margie said...

Sad and touching!
Could feel your loss!
Me move on.... but the pain of losing a loved one is always there!

25 September, 2006 06:50  
Blogger Margie said...

Should have been... we move on!
Take care!

25 September, 2006 06:52  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi samuru999,
so glad you stopped by, and thanks for your kind words!
i'm ok, i just wanted to write something.

25 September, 2006 23:45  
Blogger GK said...

Nice one, Dsnake.

26 September, 2006 19:26  
Blogger Plus Ultra said...

Simple words from the heart, I am crying with you and for you... the poem is healing for you but it will not wipe away the memory but inscribe in on the tablets of your heart more strongly.....bless you and yours!

26 September, 2006 19:56  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi gilbert,
thank you!
and i see that you have started posting again, which is good news for us.

hi plus,
thank you, you are always so kind.

i went over to your blog and saw your latest post, and it kind of blew me away, so good was it. hope to post some comments soon after i have found some words. :)

26 September, 2006 22:09  
Blogger Natalia L. Rudychev said...

I can feel the grief pouring out from the screen. The feeling that death is not fair. That sometimes there is nothing you can do though you would give everything to make it otherwise. My heart goes out to you.

27 September, 2006 06:01  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi natalia,
yes, it was not fair because she fought a very brave battle.

thank you for your comments!

27 September, 2006 23:34  
Blogger iamnasra said...

Im so sorry for your lost I lost my father even now its been years still its hard to let go

May God give u the power to overcome your grief

Be well

29 September, 2006 04:32  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi iamnasra,
thanks for visiting!

sometimes it's hard to let go.

29 September, 2006 22:41  
Blogger Unknown said...

' Looking out at the sodden sky about to weep' What a wounderful line. You nailed it with this one. Isn't it good to know that after some year that a poem stands up holding its own thoughtout the passing years. This poem is timeless as all good poetry is. Thank you for your comments on the grapic poems what I am trying to do is reduse words to an object so that being able to read them is not so important but I will take your subjeation and post also what the words are saying

01 October, 2006 00:04  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

hi david,
thanks for your comments! i like that line too,it sort of sums up the mood of the piece.

i am happy to give suggestions about your artwork because some are colorful and original and it will be a waste not to share with us. :)

01 October, 2006 09:47  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

DeadPoet, thanks for pointing out a typo! :)

07 October, 2006 01:15  
Blogger Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Oh, somehow I missed this when you kindly added the link to my post asking for people's favourite poems of their own. I'm glad I found it now. It's beautiful and real. I weep gently in recognition – accompanied by the conviction that a loving marriage is a great blessing, which lasts beyond loss. (As I'm sure you don't need telling.) A good favourite.

18 October, 2016 04:48  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, Rosemary.
it was one of my most painful moments then, but i was a blessed person to have known her.

19 October, 2016 21:51  

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