some things are eternal
Today will be my late wife's birthday, if she's still alive.
Here is something I wrote for her. Strange, how most of my favourite writings were written in a short space of time. This one was done in less than half an hour, and with little revision.
image by dsnake1
2.25 a.m. 28th January 1994
why didn't death take a break
that night in the hospital?
get a coffee, take a smoke
or lose its way
but dragged those chains
down
those dim corridors
clanging, grating
a stench of rotted wood
a blur of a shadow
a cold whiff of frangipanni
then
it took her away, gently
leaving me
at 3am
all alone
looking out at a sodden sky
about to weep.
25.08.06
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sometimes, some things are eternal. -- dsnake1
Here is something I wrote for her. Strange, how most of my favourite writings were written in a short space of time. This one was done in less than half an hour, and with little revision.
image by dsnake1
2.25 a.m. 28th January 1994
why didn't death take a break
that night in the hospital?
get a coffee, take a smoke
or lose its way
but dragged those chains
down
those dim corridors
clanging, grating
a stench of rotted wood
a blur of a shadow
a cold whiff of frangipanni
then
it took her away, gently
leaving me
at 3am
all alone
looking out at a sodden sky
about to weep.
25.08.06
========
sometimes, some things are eternal. -- dsnake1
posted by dsnake1 at 12:20 AM
24 Comments:
Strong emotions in this one. One can quite feel the sorrow coming off the screen.
Often when something affects me deeply, like lost, it doesn't take a lot of time to come up with something strong.
- Liz
Your poem reflects the deep wound a close loss produces. It never heals, we just cover it up. These anniversaries can sure take the wind out of you, my heart goes out to you.
pat has said it for me
Good one. Love endures through separation and loss. That's the beauty of this unique gift.
Hugs to you my friend.
hi Liz,
i guess it's true that hunger, anger, joy or loss can push a person to write or paint stronger.
hi pat,
thanks for your kind words. i just feel i need to write something.
floots, you're a pal, thank you.
hey medusa, thank you!
i can never forget that day.
grief can produce wonderful things, and this is one of them.
as pat said, my heart goes out to you.
hi polona,
thanks for stopping by, and i really appreciate your kind comments.
wow. you wrote it very well. thank you for putting here.
hi steve,
thank you!
Sad and touching!
Could feel your loss!
Me move on.... but the pain of losing a loved one is always there!
Should have been... we move on!
Take care!
hi samuru999,
so glad you stopped by, and thanks for your kind words!
i'm ok, i just wanted to write something.
Nice one, Dsnake.
Simple words from the heart, I am crying with you and for you... the poem is healing for you but it will not wipe away the memory but inscribe in on the tablets of your heart more strongly.....bless you and yours!
hi gilbert,
thank you!
and i see that you have started posting again, which is good news for us.
hi plus,
thank you, you are always so kind.
i went over to your blog and saw your latest post, and it kind of blew me away, so good was it. hope to post some comments soon after i have found some words. :)
I can feel the grief pouring out from the screen. The feeling that death is not fair. That sometimes there is nothing you can do though you would give everything to make it otherwise. My heart goes out to you.
hi natalia,
yes, it was not fair because she fought a very brave battle.
thank you for your comments!
Im so sorry for your lost I lost my father even now its been years still its hard to let go
May God give u the power to overcome your grief
Be well
hi iamnasra,
thanks for visiting!
sometimes it's hard to let go.
' Looking out at the sodden sky about to weep' What a wounderful line. You nailed it with this one. Isn't it good to know that after some year that a poem stands up holding its own thoughtout the passing years. This poem is timeless as all good poetry is. Thank you for your comments on the grapic poems what I am trying to do is reduse words to an object so that being able to read them is not so important but I will take your subjeation and post also what the words are saying
hi david,
thanks for your comments! i like that line too,it sort of sums up the mood of the piece.
i am happy to give suggestions about your artwork because some are colorful and original and it will be a waste not to share with us. :)
DeadPoet, thanks for pointing out a typo! :)
Oh, somehow I missed this when you kindly added the link to my post asking for people's favourite poems of their own. I'm glad I found it now. It's beautiful and real. I weep gently in recognition – accompanied by the conviction that a loving marriage is a great blessing, which lasts beyond loss. (As I'm sure you don't need telling.) A good favourite.
thank you, Rosemary.
it was one of my most painful moments then, but i was a blessed person to have known her.
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