icy
I wrote this piece recently for SingPoWriMo 2016 and posted it on my other blog. It was getting zilch eyeballs, so here it is! But seriously, it is about a sad subject.
image by dsnake1, done with Sketchpad 3.7
icy
in the time between
the first flame
and the last exhale
of breath
is
the bubbling
of death
on a heated tin foil
the quick suck of
white fumes
through
a straw
before the bones break
the flesh tears
the ants
crawl on
clammy
skin
slipping
sliding
into
the poisoned
blood
as
the blades
are drawn
&
before
the dawn
icy
dead
the dragon is too mean to chase
23/04/2016
**********
I am trying out a new, free and easy to use online art tool, Sketchpad 3.7. Still learning, but it is an amazing and fun tool. The above graphic was done with it.
"My eyes are blind but I can see
The snowflakes glisten on the tree..."
--Black Sabbath, Snowblind
Shared on Poetry Pantry #304 at Poets United.
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2016
image by dsnake1, done with Sketchpad 3.7
icy
in the time between
the first flame
and the last exhale
of breath
is
the bubbling
of death
on a heated tin foil
the quick suck of
white fumes
through
a straw
before the bones break
the flesh tears
the ants
crawl on
clammy
skin
slipping
sliding
into
the poisoned
blood
as
the blades
are drawn
&
before
the dawn
icy
dead
the dragon is too mean to chase
23/04/2016
**********
I am trying out a new, free and easy to use online art tool, Sketchpad 3.7. Still learning, but it is an amazing and fun tool. The above graphic was done with it.
"My eyes are blind but I can see
The snowflakes glisten on the tree..."
--Black Sabbath, Snowblind
Shared on Poetry Pantry #304 at Poets United.
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2016
Labels: dark, death, dreary, drugs, SingPoWriMo, social issues, urban
posted by dsnake1 at 10:39 PM
21 Comments:
An effective and seering write ds - worst of all it freezes your soul..and perhaps hope of real life if we cannot thaw
drug addiction is one of the worst prisons one can find.
thank you, Jae!
Wow DS this is a heavy subject, but brilliantly penned! Glad you shared it....this is the one dragon I never befriended thankfully.
The imagery of drugs was so vivid, and so easy to overdose so you almost think there is a death wish in that abuse.
Interesting art work, my friend. And a very serious topic........one of the worst hells I can imagine is drug addiction.
This is excellent writing. Such raw and powerful emotions here.
Beautifully executed.
Lots of love,
Sanaa
Yes, a poem that has real resonance with this state of being - great write...
Dependency is a terrible thing for the mind and the body... Your poem shows it well.
Whew, this is very painfully drawn! Indeed, that dragon IS too mean to chase!
An intense and powerful piece ... hauntingly drawn. Your artful, I thought, is very cool.
It's a shame this didn't attention elsewhere, this one is striking! The words, the meaning behind the effects of addiction and loss, but also the artistic formating, the words flow like lightning. Brilliant write!
"the last exhale
of breath
is
the bubbling
of death"....this is chilling whatever may the cause be....
Chilling!
My senses are immediately brought to attention.I feel your poem stab straight through to the inner depths of my bone marrow. Intense sounds and imagery from your word choices. Word placement on the page evokes even more imagery.This is a poem I was compelled to read several times. Your words captured me like a magnet.- gel
Strong graphic. (I have not used sketchpad. I'll try it.)- gel
How graphically effective this poem is. You have described this scourge of our society so well
and am sad it will not get a greater readership.
Donna,
thank you!
"chasing the dragon" is one street slang for this method of drug abuse, chiefly heroin.
yes, this is one dragon that one has no chance against.
Bjorn,
death wish is another way of looking at it. the abuser may know its dangers but he has no control over it. the only options are cold turkey or death.
Sherry,
yes indeed, one of the worst hells one can imagined.
glad you liked the artwork!
Sanaa,
thank you! :)
Scott,
much appreciated, thanks for your comment! :)
Magaly,
yes, substance abuse, and dependency, is a terrible thing.
Mary,
yes, it is too mean to chase!
Wendy,
thank you!
the artwork is supposed to be a pool of vomit, but i think it turned out quite abstract (which is a good thing). perhaps you can give this art tool a try. i think the learning curve is not that steep. :)
Luk Lei,
yes, i spent a bit of time formatting it, and choosing the font. in the end i settled back on good old "courier new", as it looks more edgy.
i have had some first hand experience on this as i have seen some friends who are hooked, and how their lives spiral out of control. it's sad really, because it is not just them who suffered.
Sumana,
glad that you find the words chilling. :)
thotpurge,
ah yes, chilling! :)
GEL,
i really gave some time and thought writing this poem. first, a very rough draft, then i pictured how the form will take, and finally the words. it sort of write itself, really. and all with the deadline looming! :)
thank you for the kind comment.
ah, Sketchpad 3.7. as i mentioned earlier, it was supposed to be a picture of some vomit, but yeah, it does look like a pool of blood!
i think, you being an artist yourself you will find this graphic program intuitive to use.
Robin,
i am glad that this poem is being appreciated at this community. but yes, it would be nicer if it can get a bigger readership. i have thought of tumblr or instagram, but these platforms are for very short sound bites. :)
Your own ekphrastic! Very effectively written – and drawn.
I have been wanting a free and easy art app. Thanks!
Rosemary, this app is quite fun to use. :)
Really well crafted--addiction is a difficult subject but you wrote so eloquently about it
thank you, Audrey! :)
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