no matter if it rains
The mind wanders back to a distant past as I was reading the words to this prompt.
photo by P. Kratochvil
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no matter if it rains
now this rain
seems sterile
antiseptic
like hypodermic needles
driving
into my face
because it seems
to cleanse
these stinks
these grime
from the city
and the demons
that claw at me
from within.
i get off my bike
to take cover
at the bus shelter
not because
of the rain
or the wetness
or the slippery
roads
but because i was cold
cold because
i miss you
and i feel like
crying
and i am hoping
you will not see me
in such a sorry state
as the last lights
of the day
battles the incessant
rain.
but then
no matter if it rains
it will have to stop
somehow.
26/10/2014
**********
Today, no matter if it rains,
It’s time to follow the path into the forest.
*
from "By the Same Author" by James Longenbach
I was inspired by the lines from the above poem (and some mind wanderings). This is a prompt from the Bibliomancy Oracle. It can work in aching ways.
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2014
image from publicdomainpictures.net
no matter if it rains
now this rain
seems sterile
antiseptic
like hypodermic needles
driving
into my face
because it seems
to cleanse
these stinks
these grime
from the city
and the demons
that claw at me
from within.
i get off my bike
to take cover
at the bus shelter
not because
of the rain
or the wetness
or the slippery
roads
but because i was cold
cold because
i miss you
and i feel like
crying
and i am hoping
you will not see me
in such a sorry state
as the last lights
of the day
battles the incessant
rain.
but then
no matter if it rains
it will have to stop
somehow.
26/10/2014
**********
Today, no matter if it rains,
It’s time to follow the path into the forest.
*
from "By the Same Author" by James Longenbach
I was inspired by the lines from the above poem (and some mind wanderings). This is a prompt from the Bibliomancy Oracle. It can work in aching ways.
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2014
posted by dsnake1 at 11:15 PM
15 Comments:
rain , tears go hand in hand
Rain is cathartic...a lovely write Lee San :)
I love how one beautiful piece inspires another. Your poem was sad, but so lovely. Rain...it just makes a soul sing.
it will stop eventually...though in the mean time the rain will hide the tears...but i think it might take a bit to get that warmth back...in the after....
very sad.. it's touching. i like the part that you don't mind the rain but being cold from missing someone is something unbearable.
i know that rain, the hard cleansing properties both of nature's rains and of our own sorrow-driven tears
a strong write
"Well, this is nothing new, nothing
to rattle the rafters in the noggin."
That is what I got asking Bibliomancy, thinking about you and where you are at.
I work my way up the list of Poetry Pantry hoping to find you and there you were... with another wonderful piece. Have a great week my friend and you captured my mood as I am feeling this week.
Pain and on the pity potty. :-)
ZQ
Yes, the rain has to stop somehow....and sometime. And would it be the worst thing if someone saw a person with tears?
Very poignant, Lee San......the rain, the cold, the memories, the missing.......yes, it all has to stop sometimes, if only for a while.
Yes, songs about rain and real rain seem to affect our moods being on melancholy remembrances. Well written poem very visual.
Everything finds a way to stop, somehow. Very good writing dsnake1 :)
Ah, a cleansing, driving rain. No wonder we seek shelter then, we who do not wish to let go.
Vandana,
it does! thanks for visiting. :)
Sumana,
rain can be cathartic. actually, i like the rain. :)
TALON,
yes, i like how one piece leads to another. :)
Brian,
it does take a bit to get the warmth back. i was recalling one bike ride i took many years back.
Natasa,
true, suddenly the rain doesn't matter anymore.
Ruth,
thank you! both have cleansing properties. :)
ZQ,
what type of stuff you get at the oracle? :)
i was very busy at work, getting to grips with a new software application.
i hope you are okay, my friend.
Mary,
thank you! i won't know what others might say about a person with tears, but it is an interesting thought. :)
Sherry,
always glad to see your comment :)
G L,
true, the rain has a way with melancholy. :)
Torie,
thank you!
Susan,
strange, isn't it? we always tell ourselves to let go, but sometimes we have to look back. :)
I like this moment even though it has a sadness to it. The description of the rain mixed with the state of longing are a good combination.
Hi Justin,
thank you. i was concerned that the poem might fall into self-pitying territory. :)
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